I WAS HERE

I WAS HERE

A Poem by EMMIE

I touched your walls
I danced to the beat of your heart
I made it the soundtrack of my life
I was here

I bathed in your warm feelings
I basked in the light of your love
I swam in the deepest waters of your tears
I was here

I carved my name in your veins
I cleaned your arteries 
I sang a happy tune to your sadness
I was here 

Inside of your heart

© 2012 EMMIE


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Very sweetly personal and short. Intimate and perfect:)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Deeply romanitc, and with less words more brilliant then ever. Beautiful work!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Very romantic...your words give that divine feel to this piece and I love the way you conclude the poem.. its not abrupt yet it leaved the feel of things untold! Nice work Emmie :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


What a lovely write and feeling for this person to have, knowing that they have someone strong by them through the good and the bad.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Beautiful and touched with sadness. Excellent work.

Posted 12 Years Ago


beautiful :D
feels like two are one living within each other
lovely poem :D

Posted 12 Years Ago


What a wonderful work of art. I loved "I danced to the beat of your heart
I made it the soundtrack of my life," just greatness.

Posted 12 Years Ago


What a disparity in the emotion the words "was" and "am" portray in terms of past and present tense. The shorter a poem is, the more powerful each word can be and word choice becomes all the more critical in conveying the message. Another great write. I look forward to reading more of your work.

Posted 12 Years Ago


wow!what a touching poem with emotions deep to the core. u have personified the affection nd emotion and the way u streamed it thru ur heart,soul and arteries...its just so wonderful and awesome.Thanks for the invite. I loved it so much

Posted 12 Years Ago


Sad, because its all past tense. A love lost is a heart full of pain. This is beautiful.

Posted 12 Years Ago



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Added on February 4, 2012
Last Updated on February 17, 2012
Tags: LOVE, HEART, TEARS, VEINS, SONG, HAPPY, LIGHT, SUN, BEAUTY


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