ONE

The One - YOU knew I was... the One - WE are...

One

 

ONE Love... This we have created - ONE.
Living in the moment, looking into the next...
We grow stronger in a faith that most do not
experience.
We keep our hands on this world - we own it.
Looking into the sky, those stars immense oblivious,
we are their keepers.
We are ONE, this Love above and beyond any previous.
Consider the source never forget... Life Partners.
Let the waves wash out - reach for the Mountain Tops...
Creating everything new... the future - we use the past.
My Love is an Eternal Fire... engulfed.
Embrace our fulfillment...
Carry me...
Fill me...
I am your mirror reflection.

 

Copyright ©2008  Candida Dawne Colson

 

Author's Note

I am intrigued... please do give me honesty.

Reviews

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Lovely, Candi.. a beautiful poem and nicely written.. I would love a love as this, we all would..
It also reminded me of U2 One.. one love but we're not the same we've got to carry each other, carry each other.. of course they are talking brotherly and sisterly love..
God poem.

Chloe
xoxo

[R.L. OHLHAUSEN]

Excellent read....

[Michael V]

you project a solitary yet comforting presence....It is quiet nice and it Lax's you..:)

[Chris Zahar]

It's a beautiful poem. One very different from the genre that I typically write, but certainly a beautiful poem.

[forfila]

Awe wow, this beautiful, strong and brilliant,, I will add this to my favorites as strength providing in dark times...

I love it truly

Love

Matthew

[Prose-full]

"We keep our hands on this world - we own it"------powerful, i love it

"My Love is an Eternal Fire... engulfed.
Embrace our fulfillment...
Carry me...
Fill me... "
this is amazing....honestly amazing

"I am your mirror reflection."--------hit me right in the chest.....love this piece.....great write.great write...

[Molly]

I really liked this, especially the phrase "I am your mirror reflection."

[kree8ivity]

You will render powerful punctuation impotent if using it in excess and that is what I feel you've done with the ellipses in this poem.
Another thing I found jaunting was being unable to shift from image to image as you wrote them; it gave me the impression that all of those ellipses contained necessary words and feelings which would make this poem flow, but unfortunately I hadn't enough information to guess what was implied by the many ellipses.
Here comes a tangent: I'm still trying to figure a concept of Love which isn't flawed... so many different opinions, and even more "broken hearts" than opinions! I've never had a "broken heart" and I can't really sympathize--are these people just complaining and depressing themselves because some too-perfect romantic ideal of theirs turned out imaginary?
I know if I ask any person to define love and bear that definition in mind, if I ask another person to define love, the definitive qualities of love will have changed, even if slightly, but I expect grandly.
Sigh.
Oh, your poem! Right! Haha... I think it's beyond my ability to review or rate. As far as technical observations, I've given them. Be more careful about your punctuation use and you'll have more control over your reader's attention.

[Bear]

I've been thinking of going to sleep for hours now but, I fought my dropping eyelids to read ONE and honestly I was seeing two individuals "married/joined/teamed" together and then "I am your mirror reflection" had me sitting up straight awake!! What a fine write, surprised me with that ending line! Bravo!! I'll enjoy this poem for a long time to come.
Thanks for sharing such intriguing thoughts!! ;~) oh, this one has me smiling big time!! Thank you!!!
Bear

[David Darabian]

I usually don't read peoty or even write it but I liked yours. I loved the 3 last rows; Carry me... Fill me... I am your mirror reflection. It's a real stong ending to your nice poem.

[Diamondjules]

Well said and well done, my new friend. This poem should touch everyone who has a heart...at their very soul. Bravo!