Crimson

edited version

Crimson rivers flow from
Young black bodies down,
Staining concrete sidewalks
Iron brown.

Crimson poppies growing in
Foreign fields... betoken
Young Warriors bones
not forgotten.

What crimson tribute
Represents discarded youths;
Who fight and die for
Absurd truths?

Reviews

[Pete Langley]

This poem is a complete truism. All layers of society try to control their own bailiwick - from street corner pimps and pushers, through gated communities, minorities and multinationals to governments. Ultimately the colour of their reaction to threat becomes crimson. Tis part of the psych of man. Territory is all. The dolphins have it right, Jack. Nice piece P

[Jack Dawkins]

Tank you Pete, I wasn't thinking about Flanders Fields when I wrote it, but I did spend a week inBelgian last year and was amazed at all the poppies growing along roadsides and train tracks...Icertainly did think of the John McCrae poem then, Thanks again for your comments.

[Renée]

well written heavy message

[Jack Dawkins]

Thank you I wrote it a while ago but did some editing yesterday.

[Riley]

Reminiscent of Flanders Field.
I like your "Crimson", Jack.
Poignant submission.

[Jack Dawkins]

Yeah I guess, I was thinking about the increase in gang violence in this country.

[clairekeown25]

a sad truth

[Jack Dawkins]

Thank you. I peeked at your bio. So your wondering about a holographic universe, are you? I personally believe that there is a lot of truth in it. Have you visited this site? http://www.crystalinks.com/holographic.html

[clairekeown25]

some of my poetry reflects on the idea, sias eye, half way to another world, i love how quantum mechanics is similar to the magic of eastern mysticism, i like to keep an open mind and imagine all these strange theories have there place, i will look at the site, thank you

[Jack Dawkins]

No problem, you mentioned it and I had come across it some years back and I thought that I'd point it out in case you're interested