Airy in Malta

Holiday fun and good old advice from Dad

Airy the bar when Adonis breezed in.

Scary the hairs growing dark on his chest.

Wary was I as he brushed past my chair,

looking for someone whose bed he could test.

Champagne was ordered, the best he could buy,

flashing his wallet he toasted my health.

Gleaming the gold on his new Rolex watch,

chatting he boasted of all his vast wealth.

Hand-stitched his shoes, Italian crafted,

polished and white I remembered my Dad.

"Never dear Chrissie consider a man,

in white leather shoes, it's bound to turn bad".

Finished it was before it got started,

one glass of fizz and then I departed.

Reviews

[Butters]

This is different from most of the poems I see on this site. I thought it was creative and well thought out. The second line in the first stanza troubles me a bit because I personally don’t like the word choice of -scary. I don’t feel like it fits with everything else. I like it though!

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Butters. And if you had seen all that chest hair bursting through a medallion and a pink shirt, maybe you would have found it scary lol. As a young woman, I know I did. Thank you for calling. I appreciate your review.

[Butters]

Lol, I guess so

[Chris Shaw]

:))) ...............

[Neville]

Always listen to ya Dad Chris, my Dad told me that, I don't know how many times ................................ :)

[Chris Shaw]

Yep, listened too much I did. Thank you for finding Malta. It needed an airing.

Chris

[Dave Brown]

Just came across this and thoroughly enjoyed it
You are 'The Man' er, I mean woman!

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Dave. An oldie which was great fun to write. Pleased to see it having an airing.
read moreThank you Dave. An oldie which was great fun to write. Pleased to see it having an airing.

Chris

[Jimmy Yetts]

An adult daughter who takes her father's counsel, seriously.
Becoming a genuine societal rarity.
But, of course, this was a fun write; a task at which you
overwhelmingly succeeded.
Clever concept; excellent rhyming!

[Chris Shaw]

This was so much fun to write and based on fact as well. Thank you for giving it an airing and bringing a smile to my face.

Chris

[Relic]

The wisdom of your dad probably saved you a lot of grief ahead. White leather shoes? Yuk. :)

[Chris Shaw]

Laughing out loud. Glad you agreed with my Dad's wisdom :)))

[alanwgraham]

A very classy and witty poem Christine. Is it a sonnet perchance. I'm not too keen on strict rules myself and I like the way you've played about with rhymes in this one - the rhymes at the start of the first verse are good. Your conclusion is wise.
Regards.
Alan

[Chris Shaw]

Hello Alan. Never intended it to be a sonnet. Just set out to make a smile or two. Thanks for you very kind review.

Chris

[Maxwell Ryder]

Bravo! And great advice I’m glad you took. Loved this! Right out the gate, an enjoyable read.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you. A bit of fun for a change. Can't be serious all the time.