September Melody

(drifting along on the river)

Remnants of misty autumn lifts

Sun floods our space, a trace of us

Stirs that mirrored glass reflection

Only the purr of an engine

Like a cat, fattened with cream of milk

Top of the morning, flat on her back

Worshipping in warmth

We drift and pass, willows weeping

Sweeping, tips wet, tresses touching

Caressing, a young girl's hair

Softly in September's care 

In company of ochre boats

Confetti floating in a swirl

Of fallen leaves, we make our way

A melody of moments in

A perfect autumnal day

Reviews

[emipoemi]

Very soothing! I could feel the charm exuding from the lines. I only had trouble with the first line - and this may be a British vs Canadian thing - but should "lifts" be "lift" because "remnants" is plural? Just wondering. This is a marvellous poem overall. Well done!

[Chris Shaw]

You are probably right. Every now and again the grammar thing can slip me up. Thanks so much for your visit emipoemi.

Chris

[emipoemi]

my pleasure.

[sette]

there is something about september that captures the spirit of people.. maybe because it is nearing christmas

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you settle. It could be, but there again it might be the spectacular colours some parts of the world get with autumn.

Chris

[Carolynn]

You make September sound like the crown jewel of the months - very hypnotic and soothing - loved it :)

[Chris Shaw]

So pleased you enjoyed the read Carolynn. Thank you for checking in.

Chris

[barleygirl]

Autumn is my favorite time & this year it's come early & I'm lovin' it! Your poem brings on all the ways I love autumn. Since it's cooler, the dogs laze on the sunny deck soaking in the slanted rays. Love your vivid kitty descriptions! It seems we enjoy certain aspects even more when we see our pets enthralled. They teach us to take a moment, take it all in, savor each detail as you've so joyfully shown us here (((HUGS))) fondly, Margie

[Chris Shaw]

Thanks Margie for your lovely response. You continue to enjoy every little bit of autumn along with your pets.

Fondest

Chris

[emmajoy]

' A melody of moments '.. that one phrase is a symphony, Chris" It says so very much. You have a way of transporting your readers into a special time, place and importantly, a feeling - an atmosphere. I need the peace and gentleness of your language so very much. Superb, truly superb, dear friend.

'Sun floods our space, a trace of us ~ Stirs that mirrored glass reflection.. ' That, Chris, is true poetry.

[Chris Shaw]

It really pleases me to know you enjoyed these lines so much Em. Your reviews very much welcome. Thanks so much

Chris

[Einstein Noodle]

cats definitely know how to relax in the autumn sun :) i think your poem captures a blissful moment ... made it human ... and invited me to my own remembering in your poem's scene ... you have a gift ma'am! pleasure to read this morning ..i am having some neighbor troubles ... the kinds of things that one unwantingly wakes up ruminating over and over and over .... experiencing your poem led me back to my peaceful joy ... thanks!! :)
E.
E.

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Mr E, pleased I was able to bring you a little peaceful joy. Good luck with your neighbour troubles:))

Chris

[Einstein Noodle]

amazing what a day in passing a difference can make ... i feel much better today about the "neighbor" ... thankful for a few incites gained

[Chris Shaw]

Pleased to hear your news :))

[Lorry]

This is such a beautifully painted picture of the warmth of the memory, feeling the softness of the breeze on your skin on an almost calm day. The happiness at the memory shines through your words and leaves the reader wishing they had experienced that day of confetti and melodies.

[Chris Shaw]

Pleased you enjoyed my September Melody Lorry. Thank you for your lovely response. Hope all is good with you.

Chris

[Lorry]

It is. Well, when I say good, I mean its not currently hellish :)
Just spent 10 days in the middle of nowhere. Havent moved off my bed since I got out the bath. Im never leaving my bed again :)

[Chris Shaw]

rest up :))

[Vivian Gospel]

Transported me right on a yacht with my loved ones on a breezy, sunkissed September Sunday. Alliteration much?

[Chris Shaw]

Happy to assist you on your thought travels. Thank you for your response.

Chris

[DIVYA]

So exhilarating are your words here Chris! You take me there, you make me revel in that beautiful September day, with you. Refreshing and brilliant imagery there! I just loved it!

[Chris Shaw]

September can certainly bring some lovely warmth and scenery. Thank you DIVYA. Hope all is good with you.

Chris

[DIVYA]

I’m very low at the moment. Grappling with an aching, over fatigued brain.

You’re most welcome Chris.

[Chris Shaw]

Sorry to hear that DIVYA. I do hope you start to feel better soon.

Chris

[DIVYA]

It’s just the weather probably. I hope to bounce back soon. Thank you my friend!

[Jimmy Yetts]

Was born in September--which, to me, is a month much too short and laden with sentimental reverie.
Old Man Winter draws near and, of course, my future grows shorter.
Calls to mind the old song lyric: "...and the days dwindle down to a precious few."
"September Melody" is a unique and utterly lovely creation!

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Jimmy. September is not the happiest month for me. Signals the end of summer and the onset of cooler, wetter days. It's more a mood thing with me, going back to school days. I always got that knot in my tummy, returning to classes after the summer break. It has stuck ever since. Pleased you enjoyed my September Melody, hope it warmed your heart, and happy birthday for whenever it falls in this month.

Chris

[Jimmy Yetts]

Thank you, Chris.