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You bring me a kaleidoscope

of coloured swirls,

patterned pathways, crescent curls.

Shapes which oscillate and turn.

Hues that burn in blazing heat.

These shades and tones are indiscreet.

They are the colours of desire,

wanton passion, tongues of fire.

Red and yellow combination

spell out DANGER, not temptation.

Yet dressed there in your top and tails,

you offer me in your left hand

a single orchid pure and white.

You hold a flower which delights.

Polite, respectful, somewhat coy,

is this a ploy? Is this the man you are?

Could you be Satan in disguise

or have you fallen from a star?

Reviews

[Lorry]

Hmm, danger or temptation....Call me a cynic, but this is the world we sadly live in. To be honest, with all the possible dangers out there, im surprised this whole dating malarkey ever took off.
Its bad enough from a guys perspective, but a woman hearing a line these days must think "hmm, should I leave my comfort zone and move into a strangers, who are generally speaking the biggest threat to our kind, have a few drinksand hope im not spiked and tomorrows headline in the local paper?
But it seems we wouldnt have it any other way.
As I said in my previous review to ya, no wonder kids think we're weird. :)
Ps...this review may have been cheerier if I hadn't just seen gritter trucks out my kitchen window. Sorry about that :)

[Chris Shaw]

Aw Lorry, I hope those gritter trucks, weren't chucking it your way? :) Piece of artwork on an avatar, made up a story about it. Cautious Chris, that's me. Thank you for checking this one out.

Chris

[Lorry]

You're welcome. Not a snowdrop in sight yet either :)

[barleygirl]

The word "avatar" is used so widely these days, I had to google it to fully grasp the possibilities in your poem. I get the feeling you are suggesting that we hold up a shield to represent the person we want to pretend we are, online, it seems. I am fascinated with stories about people being catfished, so your poem ends on a similar questioning note -- do I really know this person? I love the intense imagery in your first stanza & I love the questioning in your second stanza (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Chris Shaw]

Thanks Margie. This was indeed about the avatar a contact was using, which he had chosen. It was an unusual piece of artwork, so I thought I would have some fun with it.

Chris

[Jaskaran Singh Sethi]

Your poem nailed it . you rock mam.keep writing more and more of such beautiful stuff and I will be yearning for more and more

[Chris Shaw]

Pleased for your visit and your thoughtful review. Thank you.

Chris

[Jaskaran Singh Sethi]

My pleasure

[LazerRays]

This poem made me dizzy haha. It's kinda psychadically interesting and appealing to me. Like staring into a hypnosis spiral swirling over and over. I don't know exactly why I like it- it just burrows into your head. I shall forever nickname this the parasite poem. ;)

[Chris Shaw]

Smiling at your response Sarah. A parasite poem eh? As long as you enjoyed the read, that's fine by me. Thank you.

Chris

[LazerRays]

hahah i enjoyed it very much :P

[Jon Roggie]

Just because some may fall from the heavens, does not mean they are untrustworthy, but you might keep your eye open! I like the play of words.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Jon. I appreciate your comments.

Chris

[John the Baptist]

An avatar is a manifestation of deity, but we are left to wonder at the nature of the deity the subject of this poem may represent. The speaker is not certain, entertains the possibility it might be Satan. The first verse gives the impression that the avatar gives out vibes of sensuality, even danger. Verse two, however, counters with images of purity, such as a white orchid. Of course, the orchid is offered with the left hand, which symbolically means evil. There is no certainty, but my gut feeling is to advise the speaker to drop this dude like a bad habit. Something's not right with him. A very interesting work here.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you John the Baptist for your sound reasoning. The orchid in the left hand, something I noticed as well.

Chris

[Mark]

Very niceIy done. I love the way it fits together, neat and trim. Nothing excessive, yet it still holds a lot and tells a great story. The age old question, Good or Evil? If this someone you've encountered, I certainly hope you choose wisely ! Again, nice job.

Mark

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Mark. Pleased to receive your response.

Chris

[Jimmy Yetts]

Apt title.
These strike me as questions a woman should always ask herself before entering, too deeply, into a relationship.
Perceptive poetry, Chris!

[Chris Shaw]

Many thanks Jimmy. Your response, appreciated.

Chris

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

How fascinating when passion and fire exist alongside polite and coy. Whether this is an imaginative figure or a real person, you have painted him uniquely with the brush strokes of your pen. I like to keep such seemingly mythical creatures firmly in my fantasies :)

[Chris Shaw]

Yes better kept in the fantasy. I was writing about an avatar.

Chris

[Ana Papaya]

so hard to tell sometimes, I get duped a lot.
and nowadays it seems you can't trust anyone...
still, it's good to take a chance, he may be a star

[Chris Shaw]

It's risky and I've always been far too cautious. Still it's nice to ponder? Thank you Ana.

Chris

[Coyote Poetry]

The trickery of love temptation.
"Could you be Satan in disguise
or have you fallen from a star?"
The above line are the questions asked often by us. Thank you Chris for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you Coyote. You are always welcome here.

Chris

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome dear Chris.