There But For Fortune

There But For Fortune

A Poem by Chris Shaw

gun metal sky weeps
dying in blood red farm fields
poppies breathe their last 

© 2021 Chris Shaw


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Chris - every time I read the word "poppies" I immediately remember the poem "In Flanders' Field.' Makes one wonder, will we, can we ever learn? "To you from failing hands, we throw the torch. Be it yours to hold on high, for you break faith with those who die, we shall not rest, though poppies grow in Flanders' Field.
Take care - Dave

Posted 2 Months Ago


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Chris Shaw

2 Months Ago

Flanders Fields such a poignant poem. Thank you so much Dave. All the best.

Chris



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Poppies, yes the thing you wear on Armistice Day. Tell me as I am forgetful, is it a remembrance, a mourning or is it a celebration- a rejoicing. I once knew; I'm sure I did.

Posted 2 Months Ago


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Chris Shaw

2 Months Ago

Hello Delmar. I guess there are some who may rejoice, but for me, very much a time to reflect on tho.. read more
Ah, the short, sweet and powerful approach. Very nicely done!!!!



Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

2 Months Ago

Many thanks Sarah for checking this senryu out. Pleased you called in.

Chris
This poem took on a few different meanings for me and I'm at a loss for words but I did like it. I admire how you say so much with very few words. I read this last night and it stayed with me.
"gun metal sky weeps" ominous, but in all packed a mighty powerful punch for me.

Posted 2 Months Ago


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Chris Shaw

2 Months Ago

It's a senryu. That is three lines of 17 syllables in total 5/7/5. The idea is to get as much imager.. read more
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“gun metal sky weeps“- powerful imagery…
The destructive impact of war, drugs, death, disease, famine, violence, all called out in your perfect 5-7-5 dear Chris. Any day it could strike any of us……Yes, “When will they ever learn?” Sooner than later I hope.

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Chris Shaw

2 Months Ago

Lovely to find you here Annette. I do hope you and family are keeping well. Many thanks for checking.. read more
Annette Pisano-Higley

2 Months Ago

Yes dear Chris, she whispers at the strangest times… love this little one. Take care and be well m.. read more
Reminds me of Children's crusade by Sting. Great poem, Chris.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

2 Months Ago

I'll have to check that one out. Not familiar with it, but I do like Sting. Many thanks Relic.
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I know your Remembrance Day is not until November, but this one made me think of John McCrae's "In Flanders Fields." There but for fortune go all the living.

Posted 2 Months Ago


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Chris Shaw

2 Months Ago

You are right John, it is in November but this one arrived early. While I was cleaning the kitchen, .. read more
Such a good impersonation of a real life event.
Good job Chris.

Posted 2 Months Ago


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Chris Shaw

2 Months Ago

Love that you checked this one out. Thank you intothemilkyway. Your thoughts appreciated.
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every line is so impactful..."gun metal sky"
that is a metaphor that just grips me so hard.
j.

Posted 2 Months Ago


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Chris Shaw

2 Months Ago

Dear Jacob. Pleased you feel each line holds up on its own. Many thanks.

Chris
Powerful, emotional little write that speaks volumes. So well penned. Tyfs

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chris Shaw

2 Months Ago

Thanks for that very encouraging review Cyprian. All the best.

Chris

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Chris Shaw
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Albert, my paternal grandfather introduced me to Tennyson when I was nine. I have loved poetry ever since but did not attempt writing a single piece until I was 40. It's never too late to try somethin.. more..

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