Mind Speak

(Spontaneous write) I don’t do love poetry

this heart of mine
hasn’t yet recovered
it still weeps for the ache
that would have quenched
its thirst

four chambers beating in conflict
with those stretched strings
in my mind
why don’t you let go
it says
why can’t you let go

snow white
do what’s right
promises aren’t made to be broken
hear that moral compass
speak out loud
the moral fibre has spoken

but still after years I weep
for the deep feelings felt
melt away moments
yes it was love though not fulfilled
an unexpected surprise
not a cheap give away token

Reviews

[keith]

i hear ya
my heart pumps blood not feelings
feelings are reactions to life experiences
a man's soul is where love hangs it's hat

ms. chris
your writes bring from me truth
there are few artists i follow
you i do ... thanks friend

[Pete]

i like where this takes us - down into those deep crevices we tend not to want to talk about. has a bit of a sting - but is necessary to jolt the heart back into rhythm when 'tis fibrillating. unfulfilled love - not an easy medicine to swallow. well done.

[Chris Shaw]

Thanks Pete, yes sometimes the muse chooses to dig deep. I appreciate you stopping by big time.
read moreThanks Pete, yes sometimes the muse chooses to dig deep. I appreciate you stopping by big time.

Chris

[Pete]

i like where this takes us - down into those deep crevices we tend not to want to talk about. has a bit of a sting - but is necessary to jolt the heart back into rhythm when 'tis fibrillating. unfulfilled love - not an easy medicine to swallow. well done.

[Victor D. Lopez]

I love the lyrical quality of this poem as much as the emotion, imagery,and effective rhyme. I've read it numerous times and see it as a ballad meant to be sung, not just read. Lovely. The third stanza is the refrain I hear in my mind as I read/sing this poem. Really effective.

[Chris Shaw]

Dear Victor, I am touched that you read this poem many times and that you also sang it in your mind. Your review is lovely and encouraging. I appreciate you.

Chris

[davidwrites]

A deeply spiritual and introspective poem

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you so much.

Chris

[Crystal David John]

A very nice poem reflecting conflict within. so many times we face such discord and disconnect, ty :)

[Chris Shaw]

You read this poem so well. Thank you for your review.

Chris

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Chris... our Heart is so intricately given when feelings are flying like a summer shower. We remember how we were drawn to close encounters that linger in our golden years... where tears can nourish our understanding. softly, Pat

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you dear Pat for leaving your thoughts. Much appreciated. All best wishes.

Chris

[DecentlyOkayWriter]

hear that moral compass
speak out loud
the moral fibre has spoken
..........
(My favorite lines, up there)
The most important thing about love seems to be that it just exists. Yet it can end in any second of the day. A wonderful breakup poem. Keep writing (although you seem to have no trouble with that-!) and thanks for this wonderful poem! ;P

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you so much for a thoughtful review. Pleased you stopped by.

Chris

[mou]

Only love allows us to get mistreated. I do not have enough words to explain how it does touch my heart. Beautiful!
-mou

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you dear mou. Your visit much appreciated. Have a lovely Wednesday.

Chris

[Thomas W Case]

Brilliant use of language. You create the scene perfectly here.

[Chris Shaw]

Thank you so much. Your words of encouragement much appreciated Thomas.

Chris