A Painful Day

This one is about a moment, a day that was one of the worst days of my life. Open to your interpretation :)

The pain still lingers from that depressing day,

I wanted it so bad only for it to blow away.

The agony, the heart break, too much to take;

Crying in my sleep but not wanting to awake.

 

My heart was broken, cut and left bleeding

And I couldn’t see where this was leading.

That horrible moment replays in my mind,

This is a wound that doesn’t heal with time.

 

I shut my emotions off to avoid the pain,

Dysfunction becomes the way I stay sane.

I wonder if someday this wound will heal…

Or is this an illusion and none of it’s real?

Author's Note

Please read and review :)

Reviews

[Nightfeather]

Wounds may heal but scares will replace your old wounds but at least the pain has swayed. Sometimes I also get the feeling that my mind is playing tricks with me and shutting of the emotions is indeed a way to feel no pain, but never forget: no pain, no gain. Pain is temporary, salvation is permanent.

Good job :D

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Nightfeather :) Appreciate your feedback :)

[Saddam]

Great write dear,
I can sensed the pain and anguish in it.
Thanks for sharing this wonderful write.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Saddam... always appreciate your reviews my friend :)

[Irenic]

A very well written poem which touches the boundary of pain and makes its shadow.

I wonder if someday this wound will heal…
Or is this an illusion and none of it’s real?
these lines made the poem more worthy.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much my friend :) It's easier to look back on this day and write about it... for about a week my entire world was drowned in what had happened. Appreciate your review irenic :)

[Irenic]

You are welcome

[Pratik Mishra]

I could feel the pain in the poem, it was so real. :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much pratik :) I appreciate your feedback :)

[Destiny Dreamer]

OH GOD, Its... I am speechless, look at the emotions and heart touching words, OMG!!! Why it didn't came to my mind. I loved loved loved loved loved it, I can truly relate myself to every single word of Urs.. You are a GREAT GREAT writer. I envy Ur this write, I wish I had written this. This is AWESOME work my friend! Keep writing like this. So heart touching and full of emotions! Best of Luck for Future! :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you soo much Dreamer... your words mean a lot :) I really left this one open hoping it would reach more people and that more could relate to it and feel as if it was something they felt one day. I am glad you loved it :) Your words made my night that much better :)

[Destiny Dreamer]

You are Welcome! :D

[AaronFreitas]

I've got a new crazy write too if you get a chance to read :)

[Destiny Dreamer]

I'd LOVE to! I'll check NOW! :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you :)

[Destiny Dreamer]

You are WELCOME :D

[R Smith]

well I love the rhyme and flow, the story line is really sad and the ending is fantastic, leaves it very open, you could have had a really bad day when you expected love to bloom and it did'nt leaving down and depressed or maybe you're fantasizing about such an unhappy ending to a dream of love, either way it makes a great poem and in this life who really knows what's real and what's fantasy, well done Aaron :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Richard... I am glad you understand why I left it open and how open it is for interpretation for the reader. Many can relate to the feelings and that's what I was hoping for. Some want more detail and want the full story but I think it would take away from the impact for the reader. Thank you Richard for your support :)

[Zoey Ree]

Wow, deep and moving. Really reached out to me as I struggle with those feelings and write about them quite frequently. Amazing description and bringing to life the depth of pain and suffering! :)

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Zoey :) I was really hoping the reader could connect and relate to the feelings... which is why I left it so open and didn't really force what I felt these feelings about onto the reader. Appreciate your review my friend :)

[Maumil Mehraj]

"I shut my emotions off to avoid the pain," ...this line reminds me of Scarlet O'Hara of Gone with the wind when she says, "I'll think of it tomorrow when i have the courage to" Something bad had happened in your life, sure, but see the beautiful result it had. A very beautiful piece of work!
Good job, my friend!
Maumil

[AaronFreitas]

That line you quoted is awesome... the day I talked about was way back in high school. I remember walking through school for an entire week not speaking... my girlfriend followed me around as I walked to my destination like a zombie lol... appreciate your review :)

[TheOne&Only]

Wow! I am very moved by this piece. Very painful, very sorrowful....Everything about it, is so deep..Im sure everyone can relate. I know I did. Thank you for sharing.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much my friend :) I am glad you could relate to it... I was hoping the readers would get to :)

[Yanina McKnight]

The rhyme scheme strengthens the dramatic effect throughout the work as a whole. Your dark tone gradually progressed within the verses and stanzas.

Pain, a logical term; expressed in your poem to describe the emotional turmoil you are or were experiencing. As the reader, I see more than just "The pain", you are left with an empty feeling. Supposedly you were close to someone, soon before you knew it, that person disappeared from your life. Through the disappearance, they took a part of you with them. It's an internal pain that causes terror and confusion. The struggle to push forward amidst the darkness is quite difficult, but not impossible.
Does true sanity cause illusions or are the illusions the real truth?

[AaronFreitas]

Good questions you pose... I think the reason I left it so open is because everyone feels pain differently. It can be something major to me but to another it could be like well thats just stupid. So that is the reason I left it open and didn't reveal all... kind of kept that truth to myself. :) I appreciate your awesome review Yanina... I always appreciate your support :)

[Yanina McKnight]

I only presented my own interpretation of your piece, I did notice how you wrote your ideas in a general statement rather than specific and to the point. Pain can also be an illusion in itself.
But I do agree, pain is different for everyone. Something severe to someone can be minor to another.

Thank you! I enjoy reviewing great writing such as yours!

[AaronFreitas]

I loved your interpretation... it kind of made me happy that you could read those words and it had an entirely different feeling for you. When I wrote it I was thinking man was this just self-created pity or were these feelings real? Was the hurt real? It's different now looking back on it :) I always enjoy your support :) Thank you

[Yanina McKnight]

Whether the feelings within your words were real or not, the emotional connection you created with the audience is very real!

[AaronFreitas]

The emotions were... they always are :) I appreciate you so much Yanina :)

[Yanina McKnight]

They are always real, it's our reality to pay attention to those small details in order to pursue a happy life.

Thank you!! :)

[Perkele.7885]

It is hard to review without knowing the cause of your pain. The poem was well written but, it left me askin', what is this all about?

[AaronFreitas]

Haha I understand... usually I tell all and the reader knows exactly what it is... this one I felt best to leave it open because I feel if I told what it was about it would not have the same impact and people wouldn't be able to relate to the story behind it... the feelings people can relate to. Appreciate it buddy... this one's staying a secret. I'll only tell it was a terrible day way back in high school :)