Last Dance

Hope you like it

I’ve waited patiently all night,

Sedentary, admiring your beauty.

You’ve danced the night away…

But this last dance I saved for you.

 

Take my hand and just trust,

Trust and believe in this moment. 

My heart is empty - but truthfully,

That means I have more love to give.

 

A quick glance into your eyes…

Proof that true beauty still exists.

The touch of your sleek soft skin…

Too amazing for me to resist. 

 

I’ve been waiting for a woman like you,

To take my hand and fill my heart with love.

In this moment our souls align perfectly…

As if you’re an angel sent from above.

 

Our song ends and the warmth of your

Tender lips releases from my lips…

I watch as you gently walk away,

Glancing back… hoping I ask you to stay.

 

But I lingered quietly and watched my dreams fade,

A pure love is not destined for me.

I pushed away an angel packed with love,

And chose to stay heartbroken even in a dream.

Author's Note

Please comment :)

Reviews

[Aries1984]

One of my favorite Russian poets is Alexander Pushkin. Him being put into a Lyceum school turned him into a hopeless romantic. Although he certainly has his share of romantic poetry, and poetic fairy-tales (folktales, whatever you want to call them) I also admire his writing because of the fact that he really played around with rhythmic styles. Once you read one of his poems, it starts to flow in one way, and then the rhyming changes making it flow in a different way all of a sudden. This is what you have done here. And that is what makes the piece a lot of fun for me to read. I'm sorry it took me so long to finally read and review this piece. I'm only now getting close to reading through all of my read requests.

[AaronFreitas]

Thanks for the compliment my friend :) I like to play with the stuff I write.... like to write the way it feels right to me and the flow that I'm saying it with. I'm glad you connect with my work and understand what I do... maybe better than I know what and why I do it sometimes :)

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

Ah, it starts out so positively. It saddens me that it doesn't finish with a "happy ending." I feel your pain. The desire to connect with and love someone is so strong, but at the same time, the fear can be so overpowering when one has been hurt before...that this desire to bond with someone dissipates in fearfulness. I hope it gets better.

[AaronFreitas]

It will someday when the right person for me comes along :) Honestly, I'm so happy to see your review... you are one of my friends on here and I truly missed ya!

[Blue]

Your first lines were so sweet they had me smiling, but you ruined the fantasy with a sad ending. But I like it. I love sad, tragic endings. Oh, I've read your "About" section. You also like dark poems huh? I look forward to reading you more, Aaron!

[AaronFreitas]

haha yes I like dark poems :) I'm comfortable in the chaos so the darker stuff is interesting to me. I appreciate your review... I'll try to write some more sweet stuff :)

[Mara]

Wow

"I pushed away an angel packed with love,
And chose to stay heartbroken even in a dream."

I really love the last two lines, amazing

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Tee :) I tried my best so I am glad you enjoyed it :)

[Sami Khalil]

"A pure love is not destined for me.
I pushed away an angel packed with love,"

Sad in tone but beautiful in composition. Women will find this hard to resist. An outstanding poem...:)..........

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Sami... it was one of those moments in life where it seems like no matter what you wont find happiness from love. Even if it was thrown in my face I'd push it away. I tried to get that across in this write :) Thanks for your review buddy I appreciate it :)

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. You are welcome. ....:)......

[Veronique]

Such a beautifully sad and very heartfelt write of the heart my friend. Very touching and deep.Thank you for sharing your heart.

[AaronFreitas]

Thanks for your review Veronique :) I try my best my friend... it means a lot that you enjoyed it :)

[Veronique]

My pleasure Aaron...:)

[Daisy]

Such an honest expression.... wonderful.... great work sir

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you very much Daisy! It was something a little different and even I didn't expect the twist I came up with... I guess my mind works in a way it always ends up bad haha... thanks for your feedback :)

[olyvia]

this is amazing! made me want to fall in love and cry all at the same time lol. it's so gentle yet powerful and i really love that. not to mention i love the font

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you olive :) It does have that little twist and turn to make you fall in love and cry all in one read haha... as far as the font... I always try to find a font that I feel fits what I am feeling when I write it. Luckily the cafe let me upload this font with my work :) Thanks for your review :)

[mimi]

that was just amazing.. we can see the scene as we're watching a movie.. so much love and so much pain ohh!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Mimi :) I tried to create that image with my words so I am glad you can see it :) Left myself heartbroken haha

[RomaJ]

I love the softness in your written voice. Alluring and sweet. I like the imagery and feel of this piece. It's very lovely and romantic. The ending left me heartbroken.
I loved reading this. Well done, Aaron.

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you Roma... if it left you heartbroken imagine how it left me! haha so send single friends my way lol jk jk... I appreciate your review and your kind words :) Hoping to have some new material this week :)

[TrishArias]

I like this a lot!! I could literally see the girl and how beautiful she is. Your words are amazing!!! keep up the great work!

[AaronFreitas]

Thank you :) You read my last 2 pieces and it's been almost 2 months since I've written anything... think it's time to write soon :)