Lavender lullaby�

Lavender lullaby�

A Poem by An owl on the moon
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To a friend who has bled�

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A smiling blade once kissed your skin

Bleeding ruby emotions from within

For pain inside could not be carried

One would bleed or soon be buried

Yet your life holds a silver sunrise

In the deep recesses of your eyes

And hope is fire and shades of light

In the darkest corners of your night

So I sing you now this living sigh

May you rest in this lavender lullaby...

© 2009 An owl on the moon


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I love this poem! Great work. I enjoyed your addition of various colors throughout the poem. "Ruby emotions." "Silver sunrise" (I love that line!). "Hope is fire" (that's yellow/golden/orange/red). And you bring in "light" and "darkness" too! Black and white. Or shades of gray? Oooo. And, of course, the "lavender lullaby."

This is an excellent work! You use the universality of colors to convey feelings and such. Great work! I am impressed.

Posted 15 Years Ago


6 of 6 people found this review constructive.




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Such a soft and tender write lovely written like this alot.

Posted 15 Years Ago


I am in love with the first and last lines...and the enire poem as well!

The way you used the colors was lovely and the flow was absolutely perfect!

I also liked the fact that it rhymed. Those poems are my favorite. :]

Lavoro meraviglioso.

Sempre,
-Aurelia Mirella

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this is beautiful.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Such a tender piece with sad undertones... a nice dedication to a friend i am sure appreciates the care you took into writing this beautiful piece.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

very well done the flow and imagery in this piece worked well in this and the rhyme was perfect... fav lines...A smiling blade once kissed your skin

Bleeding ruby emotions from within

For pain inside could not be carried

One would bleed or soon be buried........... nice job on this one!!!



Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

beautiful. i like it.

Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

This was great. I loved the wording and the flow of this poem :)

Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Aw..

This is a beautiful poem. Not just for what it means, but for the colors and the rhyme.

This is an amazing write!

Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

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Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Colourful and this poem shines like a light in the night. A very beautiful, deep poem, one that reaches right into the heart of human emotions. The rhyme scheme was brilliant, the flow was very tight and precise. It was short, but sweet and filled with so much meaning it almost seemed like a long poem. Strong, bold and brilliant.
I love how you incorporate colours and sensual themes to elevate your work into a sublime presence, a very natural and almighty one!
Thanks ever so much for sharing! You truly are an inspiration to us all!

Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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