I drowned within a chocolate sea...

I drowned within a chocolate sea...

A Poem by An owl on the moon
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But what a way to go... :)

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I drowned within a chocolate sea

and felt the darkness swallow me

feared the worst; thought all was lost

over my mind such memories cross’d

saw sun’s reflection on the waves

tasty sweetness on my lips I craved

then I drank it down to the lastest drop

such sweet revenge; I couldn’t stop

travelled to a mall, a shop, a store

knew I had to have some more

and when my revelry was done

I smiled, though I weighed ‘alf a ton

now happy I am all my days, you see

for I drowned within a chocolate sea…



 

© 2011 An owl on the moon


Author's Note

An owl on the moon
Grab your swimsuit… you won’t need a towel… Hope you're smiling...

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This is such an intricate and distinct piece Craig, so comforting it honestly just warms the insides a bit more reading each word. It flows like chocolate pouring out of one of those fancy fountains and as sweet as a tongue could ever possibly taste. Marvellous. Great late night reading!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Craig I like it how you make the chocolate as the perfect imagery for this poem, it covers a lot of abstract meaning. For me The darkness of the chocolate and the luscious sweetness and the taste is a perfect contrast., We are mortal's that defy what is not to be even though we know we musnt but above of it, it satisfy our senses inspite of the darkness it accompanied with.


Posted 12 Years Ago


Gosh, Craig, all this time I've known you and didn't know you're a chocolate addict - talk about secretive! However, what a poem, full of lip licking meaning and utter 'sensationalism.' Errrrr.. quite like the odd truffle myself.

Great post, great fun, my far away buddy!

Posted 12 Years Ago


sweet...different, & it kinda made me hungry, but I liked it.

Posted 12 Years Ago


I will jump and drown myself in such a pool man... This is beautiful... LOVE IT LOVE IT LOVE IT...

Posted 12 Years Ago


I would def grab my swimsuit and jump into the chocolate sea! An enormously interesting and wonderfully delicous concept!! I am a big fan of chocolate. This would be one of my best dreams to jump into this sea and lap up its goodness :] Yum! Awesome poem I enjoyed it very much! Thanks for sharing :]



Posted 12 Years Ago


XD. You really know what a woman wants. What a way to go...chocolate...I, too, drown my misery in chocolate. Beats any form of medication IMO, a few pounds. So what. It's great btw.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Great visual and a delight to read. Now I want to sink my sharp teeth into some chocolate! Wonderful wonderful write, very creative for sure!

Posted 12 Years Ago



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