Stamps of Sin

Stamps of Sin

A Poem by Chelsea
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The title says it all!

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Stamps of Sin

Humanity marches

One foot in front of the other

Boots stamping out a rhythm

That seems to never break

Troop, troop, troop

 

Humanity marches

In rows of single file

Along a path of wrongs

That never seems to be cleansed

Troop, troop, troop

 

Humanity marches

The line broken

As quarrel breaks out

A routine that seems to be a given

Troop, troop, troop

 

Humanity marches

Clothed in sin

Breathing in filth

Troop, troop, troop

 

 

 

© 2011 Chelsea


Author's Note

Chelsea

This poem, I have no idea what to make of it. Just being a teenager, I always see the world as the same. All my teenage friends wear the same clothing, hoodies and jeans! That seems to be a uniform. Also it seems to be uniform to be mean. Humanity seems to get off on just pure evil. So I wrote a poem about always marching to the drums of evil. Never stopping and looking around! Also about the effect, it kind of leaves a stamp on you of evil. Or a tattoo kind of thing! Please review! Also I'm trying a new style, using stanzas, so would you mind giving me a bit on what you thought of them? Thanks (:
Thought I'd also mention, not my picture.

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clothed in sin is good trigger title....
the actions to protect seem wrong but when goodness stays silent - terrorism flourishes....america fights for her freedoms; every night we feel safe to go to bed; remember some aren't so lucky....unfortunately our troops have to sacrifice their freedom for ours....protecting our life of sin....


Posted 13 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.




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clothed in sin is good trigger title....
the actions to protect seem wrong but when goodness stays silent - terrorism flourishes....america fights for her freedoms; every night we feel safe to go to bed; remember some aren't so lucky....unfortunately our troops have to sacrifice their freedom for ours....protecting our life of sin....


Posted 13 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Troop Troop Troop. The thought process is nice...*treading cautiously* and yes..er...the flow is great. All in all a nice poem. I am not feeling very censorious at the moment so i can't give you any constructive criticism.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I couldn't agree more with what you're putting across here.
We as teenagers, seem to live in a society of conformity, if you don't conform your almost seen as the enemy. The hoodies are just another way society can label teenagers as evil or criminal, it annoys me.
Great poem by the way, loved the new style.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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