Blanket of White

A boys mother dies.

Blanket of White

Ambulance screams across the city

The sirens  

 

Her heart takes a final breath

Ambulance fails

 

A woman’s body now lies upon a stretcher

Covered in a white sheet

 

The sheet stained with salt

As her life is remembered

 

Her little boy tries to wake his Mom

By shaking her shoulders

 

He cries and pounds his fists

As he’s restrained

 

Let her go,

A voice whispers

 

She’ll always live within you,

A finger points to the little boy’s broken heart

Author's Note

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Reviews

[TheFemininePad]

This is pretty sad Chelsea. I do have a suggestion for an improvement. The line that reads, "Her heart takes a final breath" could possibly read, "Her lungs take a final breath." It just make more sense. A heart can't take a final breath. It's my only suggestion on how to improve upon your writing. I do have an exercise for you to try to help your writing. I would like to see a poem with rhymes that talk about your own religious beliefs, and how they shape your life today. That would make for an interesting poem.

[J Michael Simmonds]

Wow...okay. That's pretty sad. But I do like the last couple of lines. Memories will always keep your family close to your heart.

[Margaret Marie Hubbard]

Sad and heartbreaking. I remember sliding down the wall at the hospital when I was a teen when I learned my father had passed on. The strength of those who love you most can help pull you from it.

[Marie Harrison]

Oh, how sad. Very touching write.

[Linear]

Heartwrenching is all, poor little boy, crying out to his mom why cant I come?

[Poetic Beauty]

This is a very detailed and sad poem. The boy shaking his mother trying to wake her when she has passed on to the next world is heart wrenching.

[Rose Masen]

This was so emotional. The poem is intense and the little boy is emotionally drained but still clinging onto any last thing he can. Amazing job.

[Calypso]

This reminds me of my past.

[Kat24]

hi,
sad and really good at the same time. Kat24

[Theodore]

sad and beautiful poem well written keep up the good work.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very sad story in your poem. The memory of strategy can't be erased from a old or young mind. Your description made the poem come alive in vision. A very sad ending to a excellent poem. Thank you.
Coyote