Only one line

Only one line

A Poem by Cherry Lai^_^♥~~
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This is a poem with only one line.

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Hot chocolate makes tears disappear.

© 2012 Cherry Lai^_^♥~~


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I would create a pro/con list as I usually do, but I find this piece rather... ambiguous, I guess, so I find it hard to sort what's good and bad, haha.
Firstly, I'd like to say that the single line is a very vague. But straightforward. Honestly, I feel like there's a little bit to be desired. But it leaves the reader guessing what the exact meaning of this poem is, which is good.
Another thing is, would you actually consider this a poem, or a statement ? Technically, there is no structure to this, there is no rhythm, no surrounding context. And yet, it almost seems to be poem-like.
Not bad.

Posted 7 Years Ago


The "poem" fits the title so well. Only one line. First when I was looking at your writing, this title caught my attention, and now... Maybe that's another kind of writing style(You can try it in your journal and hand in as a homework ^_^) I'll want to try this in my own journal too, if there's a kind of poem like this.

Posted 7 Years Ago


I really enjoyed this, it seemed to have a story behind it.

Posted 7 Years Ago


May be true but is it a poem?

Posted 7 Years Ago



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Added on February 26, 2012
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Cherry Lai^_^♥~~
Cherry Lai^_^♥~~

Hong Kong, China



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