WATER

WATER

A Poem by C.
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The word was the only prompt I got. Did it for a collection of poems published every month in my school back in the day. WAY old, almost forgot about it.

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There is a thin, silver line--

A divider of worlds.

Above looks through to

Blue shadows, slowly swirling.

Below looks through to

Discord--whites and grays and reds and blues

Sharply shimmering and clashing and

Disappearing, only to shoot out again.

Two halves make the

Under: quiet, deep, alone.

Two halves make the

Over: bright, still, curious.

There is a line.

It is thin and it is silver.

© 2010 C.


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C.
Any comments would be marvelous. Surprise me.

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. oh, this is absolutely stunning ... ravishing poetry at its ravishing best ... amazing images ... amazing words ... and very enchanting deployment of the words above and below ...

Posted 11 Years Ago


I love reading this
Not just reading it, I had to say this one out loud
A few times actually, it just ran off the tongue so well
There is a flow in there, that makes perfect sense to my brain
Some poets I've seen seem to randomly press enter to break up a line and a thought for some reason I can't figure out but you don't do that
It's like everything here was deliberate
I like how the idea in the first line is repeated in a different way and the way it's worded is very effective I just get it
And the line 'whites and grays and reds and blues'
Love that, comes off the tongue quickly
I didn't just enjoy the words of this piece I enjoyed thinking about it sonically
The over and under dichotomy was great too
The only thing I can ever think to critique about the poetry of others is the structure of it and it's done so well here I can't find any part that isn't awesome
And it isn't about love and s**t, appreciate that too
Thanks for posting this

Posted 11 Years Ago



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Added on November 15, 2010
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C.
C.

London, England, United Kingdom



About
I'm a Philosophy major, Creative Writing minor. I like Philip K. Dick, Frank Herbert, Isaac Asimov. Partial to poetry. My poems are mostly short. Recurring themes: detachment, apathy, loss, melancholy.. more..

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A Poem by C.