Beloved Andromache

Beloved Andromache

A Story by clairvoyantmars

This was actually my homework in my English class. I loved it so much I had to put it in here. I hope you like it. It's about Hector and Andromache in the story the Iliad written by Homer.


I feel your eyes on my retreating back as I head toward my battle. My armor is heavy and the glare of the sun hurts my eyes. I do not look back to take in what you feel is my last sight of you. I do not glance back to the child you hold in your arms. Your image in engraved in my mind, and my heart clutches as I remember your tresses that ripple over your shoulders, the thick lashes that frame your eyes, your tear-stained cheeks as you beg me to stay. I disappear from your sight and only then do I turn back to breathe in the scent of our farewell.

Goodbye, beloved Andromache. Soon you will be back in my arms and I will be there to wipe your tears away. For now I must face the fiend who comes between us.

I lift the sword in my hand. This battle I dedicate to my king and country. But my fiend's last breath I give to my dear Andromache.

© 2011 clairvoyantmars

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This reminds me a lot of 300, the movie and the comic (I've seen and read both) & I liked it a lot. It's kind of short for my liking, just because I like to read longer works, but for being so short you fit a lot of emotion into it. I think you did a great job of capturing the moment between these two people and not many people can do that. Great job!

Posted 8 Years Ago

Sorry this read request took so long to get to dear, I usually save stories and such till very last, if I had known it was this short I would have read this first xD
This was brilliantly written. I could see their pain and feel their pain while reading it...filled with emotion and made me want to read more.
Good write, you better have gotten an A on that homework assignment

Posted 10 Years Ago

heat vision sensored; intuition burns calling to extinguish yet the feeling is never extinguished. smooth flow.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Posted 10 Years Ago

such a loving tale, brought me to tears. very emotional and loving, good job

Posted 10 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is beautiful. The emotion was captured very well. I loved it. I love the last line most of all. :)

Posted 10 Years Ago

This is very descriptive! I also think you captured the emotion well .

Posted 10 Years Ago

Beautiful and breathtaking!

Posted 10 Years Ago

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I really liked this. The suspense and giving of the poem is beautiful. The description and words literally amazed me, and kept me reading, wanting more. I also like the theme to this, and the way it fights for love and battle for one's country. The hope and desire to come back is adorable. Reminds me of Rome, and Greece for some reason, but I really really loved this. Excellent job!

Posted 10 Years Ago

This is so fitting to the story, and portrays the character brilliantly! You did a wonderful job with this!

Posted 10 Years Ago

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