Salt

Black heat, inside the chest, clings to the night

Repelling and burning light, a ghost taking over

Can't be fixed by a smile or goodness in part

They had a fast head start, and the worst demons can't be replaced by sweet angels with

Balanced hearts

Cast them out with salt water, cast them out with salt water

Dampen your green eyes with tears, and put your feet by the ocean side

Let your sweat bead on a wooden pier, and let it calm you 

Soothe slow, let it calm you

Soothe slow

You'll find it was just a dream

Well, my heart beats fast, it beats

They torch my tongue and rip my seams

Have simple words to speak with

And a mind too full and fast for me

I think what I feel is a curse, but I know what I feel is warped

I think what I feel is a curse, and that is what scares me the most

Yes, that is what I hate the most

Cast them out with salt water, cast them out with salt water

Dampen your green eyes with tears, and put your feet by the ocean side

Let your sweat bead on a wooden pier, and let it calm you 

Soothe slow, let it calm you

Soothe slow

You know, I'll never be rid of them

They may hide, as you've seen

Forever stuck with angels fallen

Filling holes that were left in me

I'll never be rid of them

They may hide, as you've seen

Forever stuck with angels fallen

Filling holes that were left in me, left in me

Please Dear, cast them out with salt water, cast them out with salt water

Dampen your green eyes with tears, and put your feet by the ocean side

Let your sweat bead on a wooden pier, and let it calm you 

Soothe slow, let it calm you

Soothe slow. You'll find it was just a dream

Reviews

[R J Askew]

Write more about the slowness ... do about another five verses and then ... and then add a 6th being a combination of the first two ... make it eight verses ... WORK hard ... put more into it ... We came from the salty seas, there is water and salt in us. We taste of salt. Salt is in the essence of life. Make the new five verses overwhelmingly life affirmative. Make it a strong poem. Put the moon and the tides of life into it. WORK HARD at it. Do more. I want more. It cries out for more. That last word ... slow ... is the start of the poem after the casting out. Get some sea salt. Sprinkle some on the table. Look at it. Study it. Taste it. Think about life. Think about the tast of life. Write the new verses with the taste of salt on your tongue. Do it.

[Angelove]

Very well written!

[Acer]

Well, my heart beats fast, it beats
They torch my tongue and rip my seams
Have simple words to speak with
And a mind too full and fast for me...

this stanza is good i'd say...lovely write indeed.

[tedefroberts]

Very well written!

[Jeremy Baker]

Beautiful ... don't change a thing!

[Wolfwind]

This was an Amazing flow of ink! It wove with power and vision onto the page, carrying your words and their essence like the ocean tides. Great Work!

[TheSweet]

Wow. It's amazing to see a poem with such atmosphere, once in a while. This deffinitely refreshed me and sent me somewhere else. There is a lot of emphasis on the layout of the poem, leaving it slightly cryptic.

Not a bad thing - just fills it with whimsey :P

[Luke Ritta]

loved the the lay out the poem.....very good write.

[BatFan38]

I loved it!

[dukovan]

agree with the lyrical feel. theres an eerie kind of echo/resonating effect in the wording.