Doldrums

Doldrums

A Poem by Crystal L. Test

 I am the masthead
The lady of the ship
Proudly holding my head high
I live to lead my crew
The wind whipping my hair
All hands on deck
As we plunge forward
Manuvering walls of waves
That threaten to pull us
Deep into the blue-black depths
We perservered
Together, we prevailed

Now, I feel lost and alone
Resentful and tired
Always leading
Destination unknown
No end in sight
Stagnant for an infinite time
I've lost count of the days
Since we've made a move forward
I need to feel the winds of ch

© 2008 Crystal L. Test


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How well, I know this story, Crystal. Been there many times. Especially the resentment side of things from leading or feeling the need to do so. My husband and I are complete opposites. I was the oldest-he was the baby. I find myself leading more than I want to, or things don't seem to get done. He is better than he ever has been, but sometimes he is too slow for me. :) I want it right now. That discontentment sets in and demands change, doesn't it?

I love the imagery here and how you gave the analogy of your life together on a ship. I can see you setting sail and coming to that place where you see no land.

Don't give up or drop your sail. Keep sailing and persevering--Communicate your feelings. The times we struggled the most was when we weren't communicating about what we were feeling.

(((hugs))), Carole

Posted 16 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.




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(i'm on a real imagery kick tonight,) haha, but yes, i loved the imagery in this. that's what a good poem is all about. most of the time, anyways. i liked this a lot, very well written. thank you.

Posted 16 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Sounds like the character is tired of being in charge. I like the masthead approuch to it. It has to keep looking ahead. Very sea worthy poem. Nice.

Posted 16 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

there is brevity and wit.
loveee your poetry sweet Crystal!

luv.

Posted 16 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

How well, I know this story, Crystal. Been there many times. Especially the resentment side of things from leading or feeling the need to do so. My husband and I are complete opposites. I was the oldest-he was the baby. I find myself leading more than I want to, or things don't seem to get done. He is better than he ever has been, but sometimes he is too slow for me. :) I want it right now. That discontentment sets in and demands change, doesn't it?

I love the imagery here and how you gave the analogy of your life together on a ship. I can see you setting sail and coming to that place where you see no land.

Don't give up or drop your sail. Keep sailing and persevering--Communicate your feelings. The times we struggled the most was when we weren't communicating about what we were feeling.

(((hugs))), Carole

Posted 16 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Oh man aint this the truth... it seems sometimes everyday its always the same and we look for anything to get out of a rut... it's hard I know.... I think we all can relate.

Posted 16 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.


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Added on March 8, 2008

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