6/14

I'm gonna be the best, it's my prognosis

need to cut people off, need to stay focused. 

Gotta remember the feeling I had when I wrote this

I was feeling de-ter-mined

my heart was bold, it wasn't hur-tin

Cause pen on the pad is a bullet to a gun

Have love for this like a mother to her son

Love is heavily rooted, in my veins

I'm here thru the losses and the gains

Everyday another lesson

Thank God for this blessing 

To give me a mind, a mind of my own

to differ good and bad, occurring in my dome

is in my chromosome , to be a man of my own.

Author's Note

I advise to read this quick and smooth. It will soothe the whole piece and also click on the picture :)

Reviews

[Hester Vane]

Amazing and inspirational!

[TL Boehm]

is in your DNA to be a man of your own. YES - a wonderful write
Cause pen on the pad is a bullet to a gun
Have love for this like a mother to her son
amen

[Jack...]

Very cool my friend. Speaks its message well.

[Clara]

You a rapper? :P

[CRZ]

Yes lol

[Astro]

I really enjoyed the opening and the middle, but the three line ending that bricks up the poem as a finished wall didn't seem as strong as the rest. I like the enthusiasm in the lines especially this one,
"Cause pen on the pad is a bullet to a gun
Have love for this like a mother to her son"

[Kristin Lee]

I love the message here: clear the clutter, keep the focus, follow the dream. Awesome job.

[CRZ]

Thank you very much Kristin.

[Rebecca Buller]

A short piece, but one filled with feeling. I simply loved it. I also enjoyed the picture you posted with this:-)

[CRZ]

Thank you & hope it inspires :)

[BL]

Interesting set of thoughts and I too like the end bit, to have a mind of your own, that's really good that such a short piece can be so thought provoking

[CRZ]

Thank you bluely, just speaking from the heart.

[BL]

That's the way

[Dean Kuch®]

Poetry being the ultimate, driving force behind any well written rap tune, I found myself thinking that this verse you've penned here would make a fantastic rap, one with a positive message for a change.

Nice rhythm and flow, ebbs and flows along to an unheard melody...Nice!

[CRZ]

You got that right &thank you, I appreciate it very much. I shall put this with a beat soon.

[Will Neill]

CRZ, you know I like your style and I think this is one of your best.
Will

[CRZ]

Wow. Thank you so much Will.