Cry Out All I Have

Burst into tears

you finally tell me

you hate me

my heart twist with pain

but your love

no matter how

I can't get back anymore

I don't know what should I say

I only want to cry

to cry out

my sadness

and leave nothing

in my body

cause I know

all I have is

Pain

and

No

More

Author's Note

Is this too short???
What do you think?
Please Review

Reviews

[Akshat♥]

sad...nicely written..pain is what really hurts...tc:)

[Short.Nerd]

my hear twist with pain,

Is that suppose to be heart?

[Angelauthor1204]

nicely done.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very sad and direct poem. Some words should never be said. Words will burn the heart and mind. I learn with age. Better to say nothing and leave with good memories and some sadness. A sad ending to a very good poem.
Coyote

[M.A. Van Dyke]

Btw, what do you mean by, "my hear twist with pain," that's the only part I didn't get...

[M.A. Van Dyke]

I think that you captured the feeling of a relationship going sour very well, I've been there and it's just as you describe it! Good job, let's just hope that you're overly insightful instead of speaking from experience!
I don't remember who this is credited to, Hemingway, Capote, Jesus? But someone was once challenged with coming up with and engaging, heartfelt, story with a beginning, middle and end in six words or less.
The fellow, or gal, came up with this, "For sale. Baby shoes. Never worn."
That does the trick for me...
The point is that length is not the issue (yes, I set myself up for a joke there..) but rather what you do with what you have to say!
Keep it up!

[Moonflower]

I like short but to the point, poetry. Very nice work, beautifully expressed.

[R E Tree]

Wow this is like a speech. I don't agree that it is too short. I think it is perfect. It's hurtful when you love somebody with all your heart and they turn to you and say they hate you. I can relate to this it feels like hell. I think this poem was wonderfully expressed. Not too deep or over the top just perfect

[Miss Coral]

Really nice job on this one.. it degenerates further and further as the relationship falls apart.. I would change "left" to "leave", and wouldn't capitalize "No" and "More" at the end.
Nice job altogether. c:

-Coral-