I've Tried

I've tried to tell you I love you,
but you never listen.
I've tried to telll you,
how much I love you,
but you ignore me,
leaving me alone in dark,
lefting me in the corner,
tears rolling on my eyes.

I've tried to tell you,
the girl in front of you,
is a liar,
she is not the one,
you should love,
it's me,
who honestly love you,
but who listen to me?

Now, you are dating that girl,
you've given everything you have to her,
just like she is your everything,
you've lost yourself,
in her lovely mask.

I tried to tell you,
but you just wont listen.

Author's Note

what do you think?

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

No-one can learn the easy way. Life is a test to see how many things we can do wrong. I like the emotion of love and friendship. Sometime good to have friends around to pick you up after you fall down. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Lilly]

I think you have done really well here! The only things I would suggest is to go over the first stanza. There is a typo on 'tell', "leaving me in the corner" would make more sense (2nd last line) and changing 'on' to 'from' I think would make more sense. You may also want to look how your using commas.

You have got the emotions of this situation across really well and have used some nice descriptions and images. I think I have enjoyed reading this piece the most out of what I have read of yours so far. Great work!

[Marie Harrison]

They never listen. I love the urgency and emotions in your voice. You're really trying to get his attention to save him from himself. But what about you? Most women, including myself tend to be selfless in relationships sometimes. Always thinking of the other person instead of themselves. But that's a generous and beautiful quality to have too.