I Don't Want To Close My Eyes

I Don't Want To Close My Eyes

A Poem by TheAimlessWanderer
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nor do i want to open them read slowly for proper rhythm

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i don't want to close my eyes

i feel it breathing

with disbelief 

my eyes are seeing

somehow 

my hearts still beating

i can feel it feeding


digging deep into the veil of night

staring from the air

my lungs are tight 

filled with despair

no chance for fight 

or flight 

i don't want to close my eyes 

i can feel it listening

i don't want to turn my back
 my skin is prickling

i don't want to look inside  
the blood is trickling

i don't want to open my eyes

but i am still screaming 

a split in my skull

i see it glistening

but what i don't see 
 the pieces that are missing ?

i don't want to look down 

see the lines are forming

i can't stare to see 
this fated warning

i don't want to look at it 
or feel its meaning

i can't open my eyes 
with these tears that are teeming

with a squint and a glint

 i see the warning

i look at my hands

crimson with mourning...

© 2016 TheAimlessWanderer


Author's Note

TheAimlessWanderer
there is a wordy little secret to this but i won't tell you it if you ask

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hi
ok i like the poem, a little confusing like you said, but i kinda follow it
i like the title and how it all works

but just to let you know this part here

(i don't to want to look at it


kinda didnt flow right, should it say

i dont want to look at it,


Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheAimlessWanderer

2 Years Ago

whoa thank you so much i almost never edit unless if it hinders the meaning thank you for spotting t.. read more



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Even though the exact meaning is not clear, it still held my attention, like I walked into the middle of a terrifying nightmare, being able to feel all the suspense and terror, yet not being able to decipher what what happening. It is intense and makes me keep reading wanting to decipher the meaning.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Wonderful imagery! I quite enjoyed reading this, I can relate to the darkness, the fear of closing your eyes, and the fear of opening them. Well done.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheAimlessWanderer

2 Years Ago

Thank you very much glad you enjoyed it
This is so beautiful! There comes a time in our life when we don't know what to do and it turns confusing to turn either way. This poem depicts exactly that feeling. Nice reading it :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheAimlessWanderer

2 Years Ago

thank you very much i am so glad you enjoyed it
Dr. YumnaKay

2 Years Ago

You are welcome! The pleasure was mine ☺
Hmm... this piece makes sense to me if I read it backwards. And it is a more horrific story if I do that. I'm not too sure if that's the surprise that you purposely hid!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheAimlessWanderer

2 Years Ago

nice you got it it also tells a different story the contrast tells the true picture very insightful .. read more
For me, it was my grandfather's closet. A dark hole running back under the stairs and if you laid thereon the bed, no telling the things that would frighten a young boy. Good write

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheAimlessWanderer

2 Years Ago

Thank you i am glad you enjoyed it though it seems i have failed to convey my meaning with this one .. read more
Ted Kniffen

2 Years Ago

Don't worry about the full meaning. We each read something into each poem that fits what we think, u.. read more
I like the reinforcement of the fact that the poet does not want to confront his/her situation.
i love the anticipation of the piece. well written my friend.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheAimlessWanderer

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much i am so glad you enjoyed it !
Such an emitional piece.... Gave me goosebumps- in a good way. Your way with words is amazing, and i really liked the fact that you threw in the whole fight or flight fact in their. Sometimes poems are so amazing you can barely describe why. That was one of theese poems. You are a great writer, amazing.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheAimlessWanderer

2 Years Ago

Wow that comment is a little over the top but thank you so much for saying that i will keep working .. read more
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hi
ok i like the poem, a little confusing like you said, but i kinda follow it
i like the title and how it all works

but just to let you know this part here

(i don't to want to look at it


kinda didnt flow right, should it say

i dont want to look at it,


Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheAimlessWanderer

2 Years Ago

whoa thank you so much i almost never edit unless if it hinders the meaning thank you for spotting t.. read more

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