I Don't Want To Close My Eyes

nor do i want to open them read slowly for proper rhythm

i don't want to close my eyes

i feel it breathing

with disbelief 

my eyes are seeing

somehow 

my hearts still beating

i can feel it feeding

digging deep into the veil of night

staring from the air

my lungs are tight 

filled with despair

no chance for fight 

or flight 

i don't want to close my eyes 

i can feel it listening

i don't want to turn my back

 my skin is prickling

i don't want to look inside  

the blood is trickling

i don't want to open my eyes

but i am still screaming 

a split in my skull

i see it glistening

but what i don't see 

 the pieces that are missing ?

i don't want to look down 

see the lines are forming

i can't stare to see 

this fated warning

i don't want to look at it 

or feel its meaning

i can't open my eyes 

with these tears that are teeming

with a squint and a glint

 i see the warning

i look at my hands

crimson with mourning...

Author's Note

there is a wordy little secret to this but i won't tell you it if you ask

Reviews

[hi]

ok i like the poem, a little confusing like you said, but i kinda follow it
i like the title and how it all works

but just to let you know this part here

(i don't to want to look at it


kinda didnt flow right, should it say

i dont want to look at it,

[TheAimlessWanderer]

whoa thank you so much i almost never edit unless if it hinders the meaning thank you for spotting that blunder glad you liked it (:

[H L Rose]

Even though the exact meaning is not clear, it still held my attention, like I walked into the middle of a terrifying nightmare, being able to feel all the suspense and terror, yet not being able to decipher what what happening. It is intense and makes me keep reading wanting to decipher the meaning.

[Enigma Monster]

Wonderful imagery! I quite enjoyed reading this, I can relate to the darkness, the fear of closing your eyes, and the fear of opening them. Well done.

[TheAimlessWanderer]

Thank you very much glad you enjoyed it

[Dr. YumnaKay]

This is so beautiful! There comes a time in our life when we don't know what to do and it turns confusing to turn either way. This poem depicts exactly that feeling. Nice reading it :)

[TheAimlessWanderer]

thank you very much i am so glad you enjoyed it

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You are welcome! The pleasure was mine ☺

[The Exiled Wolf]

Hmm... this piece makes sense to me if I read it backwards. And it is a more horrific story if I do that. I'm not too sure if that's the surprise that you purposely hid!

[TheAimlessWanderer]

nice you got it it also tells a different story the contrast tells the true picture very insightful though it was a little wordy but i was experimenting so for first time not too bad.

[Ted Kniffen]

For me, it was my grandfather's closet. A dark hole running back under the stairs and if you laid thereon the bed, no telling the things that would frighten a young boy. Good write

[TheAimlessWanderer]

Thank you i am glad you enjoyed it though it seems i have failed to convey my meaning with this one i will keep working at it thanks for reading and hopefully next time i convey my full meaning (:

[Ted Kniffen]

Don't worry about the full meaning. We each read something into each poem that fits what we think, unless of course you want the full meaning known. A little mystery won't hurt.

[costa siwale]

I like the reinforcement of the fact that the poet does not want to confront his/her situation.
i love the anticipation of the piece. well written my friend.

[TheAimlessWanderer]

Thank you so much i am so glad you enjoyed it !

[LovePoetry0004]

Such an emitional piece.... Gave me goosebumps- in a good way. Your way with words is amazing, and i really liked the fact that you threw in the whole fight or flight fact in their. Sometimes poems are so amazing you can barely describe why. That was one of theese poems. You are a great writer, amazing.

[TheAimlessWanderer]

Wow that comment is a little over the top but thank you so much for saying that i will keep working towards something more coherent and expressive glad you loved it i love the feeling of goosebumps to it means i must have done something right (: