I felt it's leaving

I felt it's leaving

A Poem by TheAimlessWanderer
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It all has purpose

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pulled away a chunk of life
it bleeds color
in the misery 
staining thee ground   ,with a blessing in contrast 
and the marks they stay
drug it away it left a trail 
it won't be  washed away
spilling out 
i can see its emergence 
and all the paths it diverges 
with its trailing color 
in its wake
in its rhyme 
its rhythm 
the gap in the mosaic,  the colored drops of dew and smoke
i felt it leaving
i can see its departure
carried on the wind and smoke
staining more lives 
more chunks of the mosaic are falling
living as though they are 
more pieces are missing 
more trails more divergences
can you see it ?
can  you see how far ?
the trails of smoke and the colored drops of dew ?
can you follow its path see its beginning ?  ,The path of dew and smoke that crossed over mine
intermingled in coalescence
 
changed my color
my missing chunk in the mosaic the ones  pulled
the ones drug away
bleeding in brilliance 
bleeding in brilliance as they are  ,bleeding in brilliance as they were
i'm stuck in the trail of color i can't see my feet or the lines they leave
i'm intermingled in coalescence
with your essence with trails of dew and smoke 
getting lost in the leaving scent
getting lost in the leaving scent
getting rained down in the rains of change 
diluted but never washed away
not to be left by the floods the torrential storms
I can see your color in the sea of color and in all its forms it dyed my wall
I can see all of your colors in the leaving of the storm
its slowly dripping out too be be refilled 
To be there with my ashes in the winds  and  storm 
my colored drops of dew and smoke...

© 2017 TheAimlessWanderer


Author's Note

TheAimlessWanderer
feel it

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You put a lot of feeling into this.
Losing someone close, or someone who changed your life for the better, is devastating. You're always on hold for a time. Some people give up, some try and move on. I always think you should say thanks for a lost one. Keeps you strong.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheAimlessWanderer

3 Years Ago

i feel the same way remembering how they changed your life and their part in you becoming who you ar.. read more
Paul Bell

3 Years Ago

I think that's how it should be. The cycle should be continued.



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Oh I feel it. In my soul, in my heart. Your descriptions are beautiful, the emotion is deep. I'm inspired, its fantastic!

Posted 2 Years Ago


You put a lot of feeling into this.
Losing someone close, or someone who changed your life for the better, is devastating. You're always on hold for a time. Some people give up, some try and move on. I always think you should say thanks for a lost one. Keeps you strong.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheAimlessWanderer

3 Years Ago

i feel the same way remembering how they changed your life and their part in you becoming who you ar.. read more
Paul Bell

3 Years Ago

I think that's how it should be. The cycle should be continued.
This may be odd to say, but I believe this is the best thing you've ever written for many reasons. First off, you basically metaphorized loss as a tangible entity that you visually see leaving from you, as if it just left on its own. I thought about tragedy when reading this, such as when someone we love dies, a part of us is taken to the grave as well. Secondly, your strong and unique diction gave the entire poem a peaceful, yet mournful tone to it. It feels like the onset of grief, when you actually come to terms with loss and it brews many emotions- spite, anger, sorrow, absolute misery. Emotional turmoil may be an accurate word to describe some aspects of the poem. All in all, your thoughts came together with such fluidity and grace... There are no other words to describe how I feel about this. Amazing job!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheAimlessWanderer

3 Years Ago

wow i did not expect anyone to say this is my best work at all i felt i was missing all those wonder.. read more
Reading this piece is an enjoyable experience. I guess I'm kinda strange coz I find this piece soothing - a different mood of what this piece is carrying. I like how you see the missing piece a chance to change people - I hope this can happen to me too!

Wolf

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheAimlessWanderer

3 Years Ago

loss is something no one really gets over but rarely do we get the chance outside of absence to see .. read more
TheAimlessWanderer

3 Years Ago

shaped who you are and there is beauty in that all things taught to us by people who have been throu.. read more

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