Shame On Me

This is about something very personal which is why the last line says "you chose to let me destroy myself." so yea...

You watch me as I drown. 

I can't scream and you don't make a sound. 

You sit there in silence...

not warning anyone around. 

If you cared for me like you swore, 

I wouldn't be in this pool of water anymore. 

I realize you lied. 

And I was a fool. 

Shame on me, 

shame on me to think your love was true. 

You played the part well...

you didn't get help. 

I asked you to keep my secret and not tell. 

I thought you knew I didn't mean it. 

But you knew...

and you chose to let me destroy myself. 

Reviews

[closed]

this is heavy
i can sense there's alot of hostile emotion here

sometimes these poems give off the most energy
good job harnessing it


-Dream

[D.T.]

THanks. (:

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmi..]

This is pain, raw and beautifully truthful. Love the phasing and image it presents. Great Job

[D.T.]

Thanks very much!

[Jamestown]

Well written and delivered!
This piece is raw and full of emotions that several will relate too,
I'm sorry that you had to go through such a thing:)
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[D.T.]

Thank you so much! (:

[sereenaoutloud]

Brilliant, powerful write DT. That feeling of being left to drown and no one offering a hand to help..being let down by those we though we could depend on and trust!!
Love it!

[D.T.]

Thanks a lot. (:

[alf]

Hi D.T. Wow!!! This is such a powerful write!!! that feeling of having lost support is so very strong, yet you haven't actually said that in words!! Love that you can project the thought into the mind of the reader. . . sign of great poetry!!! alf

[Nadia B.]

This one really hit home, especially your last line...your pauses show the severity of the wounds, and the person who hurt you was the actual fool. Betrayal is one of the worst kinds of emotional pain, from which only experience, time, and a change in situations can really heal. There are no words that really comfort when one is let down, all I can say is that the sooner you find out the better, and good riddance to lose those who you never could trust anyway. Still, just because they betrayed you doesn't mean everyone will. Brush off the dirt and get back up...that's the only way a fighter heals. I wish for you or person who this poem is about, great healing, and to be surrounded by those who will not betray you/them. Thank you for being brave to share such a personal and difficult poem. Please keep writing!

[D.T.]

Thank you for reading and for leaving ssuch a kind review!