Do You Dare?

...a different kind of poem...a different kind of poem....a different kind of poem....a different kind of poem...a different kind of poem....

There's only death here;

there's only pain.

Why are you looking

among the insane?

They are just the shadows,

lurking in the shallows;

nothing but your friends,

wanting to reach new ends.

They want to meet you sooner;

they want to be your tuner.

They just want to lend

a helpful hand to send.

There's nothing hopeful;

there's nothing bright.

Why do you look in

the dark for light?

They just want to follow,

flying like a swallow.

Reaching for tomorrow,

filling you with sorrow.

They just want to talk to

and eventually walk you

up the road of thought

where memories are shot.

There's only chaos;

there's only harm.

Why do you cower

and look alarmed?

Why are you now crying?

Surely, you're not dying.

Why, then, are you weeping?

Pain has begun sleeping;

you are free from its grasp.

Why, then, do you now gasp?

What do you see behind you?

What do you see that you knew?

These are the people;

this is the place.

What will you do when

they touch your face?

Surely, they will not harm you;

surely, they would not dare.

Surely, they will not scare you;

surely, they touch your hair,

but never meant to harm you,

and never meant to scare.

Whenever they touch you,

think of it as a dare.

Do you dare to follow?

Do you dare to meet?

Do you dare to follow

walking memory street?

Author's Note

...a different kind of poem...a different kind of poem...a different kind of poem...a different kind of poem...a different kind of poem....Do You Dare?...a different kind of poem...a different kind of poem...a different kind of poem...a different kind of poem

Reviews

[JayceeC]

I must be one who does dare as I work with students with mental and emotional disabilities on a daily basis. Touching the hair and sniffing it seems a bit strange, but not nearly as strange as them picking up an arm and sniffing it...lol

[Not here]

lol thats an interesting way to take this piece and apply it :) but still thats great you do that. my mom used to

[Crystal Overmeyer-Birmi..]

I sense a struggle in this piece to give up or to keep going. I like that short stanzas and the back and forth. Really interesting piece.

[Not here]

thank you :) i appreciate the review

[Elisa]

I love that you have such strong imagery to describe the misery and darkness, then take a step back to remind the reader that these are real people, not to be scorned or treated like animals. A very deep poem that again shows your compassion for the marginalized.

[Not here]

thank you :) im glad you think so

[Emily]

What a deep poem!
Well done!
Keep it up!

[FlatLineBeauty]

It is most certainly a different kind of poem. One with a view of how you see things. I enjoyed it. XX

[Not here]

glad you liked it :)

[pikachulover]

Unique piece, keep it up!

[Not here]

always :) thanks for reviewing

[Willard Wells]

We have a large gap in age and maybe that the reason, but this does not speak to me. Lots of good words and imagery. So sections i liked, but as a whole it left me wanting. But thanks for sharing.

[Not here]

no its okay i totally understand :) thanks for taking the time to check it out

[Riley Justine]

Gorgeous, gorgeous, gorgeous piece. Into my favourites library it goes!
I seriously love you, David. Like, write poetry for me please :P
Really well done and I love it when you try different styles

[Not here]

lol :) i would write poetry for you, but i dont know what types you like. but thanks for reading !

[Riley Justine]

Pretty much everything you write I love. I get really excited when you send me read requests lol

[Not here]

lol :) well im just glad you liked them all

[dan]

david, I am bipolar, which used to be called manic depressive. Do you know why they quit calling it that? Because 'manic' is too similar to 'maniac.' See your authors note? a different kind of poem...written over and over? That's almost a book definition of manic behavior. I hope you understand why I can't read manic writing. Keep it going though, sir. Don't let me ever slow you down. Good luck david. take care...dan

[Not here]

sorry dan, i probly should have thought about that before sending it. thanks for checking it out thought! :)