The Wanderer

When the words won't come anymore

and the days pass slowly by

and I pound against the door

as I start to kill my mind...

When the hour arises still

and I see all of the needs,

and I start to lose my will

as I look at all my deeds...

When I'm lost and hopeless, too

and my brain begins to crack,

and my heart is bleeding through

the shirt stuck on my back...

If I lose all of my power

and the words will never come,

and I spend all my hour

wading through all the scum...

If I find the place of silence

where words cannot pretend

to comfort all my violence...

Will you ever let me in?

'Cause I wander frozen wastelands

of my broken, desert mind.

And I find many misplaced plans

and I wish I could go blind.

'Cause the world is only broken.

And the silence makes me ponder.

So many thoughts unspoken,

as in the dark I wander.

Reviews

[Willard Wells]

This is a really great piece of work. One idea "of my broken, desert mind." to of my broken, deserted mind." This flowed so well and the word selection was very good. Nice work young man.

[Not here]

thank you willard :) tht means alot from you

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

I know the feeling, Dante. It's no use to force these things. I also have the experience that in a time I mostly write poems, it's difficult to write prose and vice versa. It'll come when it comes, don't worry. Thank you for sharing your poetry. :) Rudi

[Not here]

no problem rudi :) thanks for reading

[Stan Lee]

I liked it Dante. It was pretty intense. A lot of despairing... maybe that was part of slogging through the writers block :P Keep smiling. :)

[Not here]

yeah ill keep trying and keep smiling :) thnks for the review

[AaronFreitas]

This is an awesome piece to work out of writers block. Sometimes it just happens and is out of our control. To question if the art form has just drifted away from us is scary but one I can relate to. Awesome work!

[Not here]

thank you aaron :) glad you liked it

[Kim]

It's quite captivating. I like the flow and the story it tells :)
Really good work!

[Not here]

thank you kim :) glad you liked

[Imperfection2aT]

This is wonderful! It's an easy read with so much depth. Way to go! :)

[Not here]

thank you very much (:

[Amy R]

very powerful, i love the depth of this :)
great job as always David!
thanks fro sharing!!!!

[Not here]

thanks amy :) im glad you liked it

[Amy R]

ur welcome :))

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed the poem.
"'Cause the world is only broken.
And the silence makes me ponder.
So many thoughts unspoken,
as in the dark I wander."
World can be confusing and I the part of being a wanderer. Most of us till we can find reason and purpose. Thank you Dante for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Not here]

thank you for reading coyote :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome. I always enjoy your work.

[andrew mitchell]

A troubled, distracted mind of thoughts flow in this write. Nice work Dante

[Not here]

thank you andrew :) i appreciate it

[Devious13]

deep that is deep and I love it , its machab though , try to expand your mind and vocab , but keep uo the good work! dedication for sure you have talent I like some of the other pieces you wrote , and I can t wait to see the ones you have coming up

[Not here]

thank you very much :) ill try