TaKe mE AwAY

All the words that you hear

sound different in your ear

than they do in my own mind.

So many emotions I find.

It's so hard to give away

everything I feel and say

words in the way that they should be

given to you so freely.

I'm not sure if you understand

what I am typing with my hand

as my other one it shakes.

Rapidly raising the stakes.

Because the battle won or lost

will have to me giant costs.

It's my life, my death, my soul

that's being thrown into this hole.

Though every path leads me astray,

burying me in dismay,

I hoped that you would not delay.

So please take me away.

After every dragon that I'd slay,

and every time I'd save the day,

I know that I still start to sway.

So please take me away.

After all the prayers that I can pray,

after all the words that I will say,

I understand that you still will not stay.

So please take me away.

Do you understand the emotions

boiling over? All my motions

try to tell you where I'll die.

I want you to come and cry

at the funeral that I'll lead

from the coffin where I bleed.

And I'll say the final prayer

as your tears run in my hair.

So I paint my life's collage

as I sit in some garage.

Hear the melodies I say

before they all fade to gray.

Come and hear my final words, 

like the chirping of the birds.

Beauty in a final death;

poetry the final breath.

After every night alone I cry,

as the sun begins to blue the sky.

Waking up with my sheets all awry.

Please do not say goodbye.

They can stand and call me a bad guy,

they can sit and laugh and wonder why

I have to spend every moment high.

But please don't say goodbye.

With my hood up, I hide and deny.

With my music, I can cower and lie.

With my smile, I can walk on by.

Until you say goodbye.

Again I sit alone.

I hear static on the phone.

I hear voices all around

as against my head they pound.

I listen to them everyday,

as they try to lead the way

into the darkest depths of night.

I cannot put up a fight.

They are louder every time

and they've given me these rhymes.

I cannot help but write down

everything as I will drown.

Now my hood is up; it's dark.

My writing just needs a spark.

But the light has left my eyes

as I pray to burning skies.

I'm lost without a home

and sleep under a celestial dome.

Yet you still refuse to stay.

Just please take me away.

I don't want to last any more.

I don't want to face that door.

Still you slam it in my way.

Please take my soul away.

Please take my heart away.

Please take this art away.

Please make me agree today.

Just please take me away.

Reviews

[Riley Justine]

Every time I read one of your pieces and say it's my new favourite I read something else from you that is just as good, if not better! This is bloody amazing!

[Not here]

:) im so glad you think so

[dan]

david, I'm sorry I tried 6 times to read this and kept losing train of thought. I will say one thing though: your mind is so sharp and your voice so loquacious that for the two verses I really got you really weren't writing about anything concrete; but then I realized you WERE, you were setting up the rest of the meaning of the piece! Your talent to say the things you want and rhyme perfectly and consistently? Way hard for a long write. You'll be published some day. Good Luck! take care...dan

[Not here]

no no its okay. thank you alot for trying though dan :) i really appreciate all your attempts and the review very much

[Aphy!]

Amazing work hey!
Loved the format and the way it's set out
Really beautifully done hey


Aphy

[Not here]

thank thank thank you :) im glad you liked it

[closed]

remarkably written David

i really liked this one


-Dream

[Not here]

thank you dream. i hope all is well with you

[closed]

Sure thing
And im doing pretty good

Thanks for asking

[Not here]

thats good thats good. no problem

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Very good poem, Dante. I liked it very much. :) Rudi

[Not here]

thank you rudi :)

[Emily]

Very nice poem!
Keep it up!!

[Not here]

thanks emily :)

[Willard Wells]

"everything thing I feel and say" to "everything I feel and say".

I see many younger people that I feel are in this place with the hoodie up and tune playing blocking out the world and pain in their lives. The young years can be painful and not being an adult the control in your life is not always yours. You can create your own pain, but often it beyond your control. With the challenge of voices yelling head, it is hard to find yourself within the noise. I understand the pain. Good luck my friend and nice work.

[Not here]

thank you willard. i appreciate your review, and i will fix that typo

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful and emotion ride in the poetry.
"Please take my heart away.
Please take this art away.
Please make me agree today.
Just please take me away."
I like the want and the need of the words. Hard to escape present places and thoughts my friend. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Not here]

thank you for reading coyote :) i appreciate all your reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.