Inhale(Oxygen For One)

 

Just as I begin to relish

In the joys oxygen brings

A simple gust of wind

Kicks up dust

Leaving a nasty taste of life.

 

Soon time and gravity

Play their part

In opening the airwaves

Allowing free flow

Of what my lungs crave…

 

An invisible lifeline.

 

Now I wonder if it’s too late

For now when I search

The clear blue sky

All I can see for miles is…

 

The ozone layer with a hole,

Like the one in my heart.

 

As I breathe in this lonely air

My biggest fear fills my chest…

 

That I’ll exhale alone.

Reviews

[Ralphy]

This is a very sad piece and my heart holds the tears on this emotional write. I know this tune, it breaks my heart to feel the lonely exhale. This is an excellent write Dale...Ralphy

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Oh my, how heartfelt - I can really empathize with this feeling. Nice connection with nature and relationships - the hole that needs to be filled within all of us. Well done.
Light and Love,
Siddartha

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

This is the first piece I read since returning to the cafe today. I now the the true importance of air, I will no longer participate in destroying it by adding my own smoke i exhale from my lungs. You don't realize how precious breathing is until can't without oxegen.

Well written Dale and a message that needs to get out there. Our air is a gift that needs not to be abused.

[emmajoy]

Being alone is like sitting in a black cloud. Maybe that cloud hides all the other 'stuff' though so we can really test our thoughts, test our feelings; i'm not sure really, still working it out for myself.

Your poem is incredibly moving, reaches into the head and heart. Words have incredible power. You seem to be so sad in this very finely created post, it runs smoothly, no broken areas where phrases bend into the wrong shape or can be misinterpreted.

' Now I wonder if it's too late
For now when I search
The clear blue sky
All I can see for miles is�

The ozone layer with a hole,
Like the one in my heart.'

Guess we can't do too much about the hole in the ozone layer but, but, we can find a cure for the hole in the heart more love you give, God willing, the more might be shared.

Smile a little smile, go write something happy and optimistic. Thank you for sharing.

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There is a place at which we can generally each arrive. It is together . . . that we realize that indeed we are "all one." This was very effective.

[T]

Wow! You really touched my heart with this heartfelt poem. Wonderfully penned, cowboy! hugs

[Angelic Darkness]

This is a good write. There is something serene about this...the flow,
the freedom, yet the sadness, but it all works well together.
Thank you also for my review. AD

[Winter McPherson]

Such an interesting use of oxygen as a symbol of our emotions. I liked this one a lot. The twist at the end landed directly where it should have. In the hollowness of our fears. Well done!

[Ladysue]

Oh Dale, you really got me with this one. You are such a gifted writer. They way you express yourself is not only beautiful but it comes with a certain talent that can produce such a feeling to all who read. You have a great flare. This was very sad, but I think it speaks for so many people in this world. Your writing touches people. I think so many people can relate to this piece and I think that is what makes an excellent writer.
My favorite lines... They are brilliantly expressed and convey the message perfectly!!!

The ozone layer with a hole,
Like the one in my heart.

As I breathe in this lonely air
My biggest fear fills my chest�

That I'll exhale alone.

Really an excellent and impressive write, my friend!