A Raven Of Hope

  

Misfit shadows lay alone

In shallow graves

Awaiting …

Wanting …

Needing …

Someone to bring life

To their paper-thin emotions.

 

The fog rolls in

In the nick of time

To make the illusion

Of happiness…

Support…

And love…

Of their faceless souls

That mirror depression.

 

Finally relief arrives

In the form of the undertaker

Not what they asked for

But what they received

Unusual light…

Flickering flame...

Hidden emotions…

As the dirt begins

To seal their fate.

 

A last comes the raven

In the knick of time

Whisking them away

On the wings of forever

Towards a blue sky.

 

Reviews

[Lyrical Love]

This took my breath away...
I am awed at the voice you speak in for this piece.
This is an awesome well worded write.
The fog rolls in
In the nick of time
To make the illusion
Of happiness�
Support�
And love�
Of their faceless souls
That mirror depression.
~~~~~I have to read more from you.
This spoke volumes...loudly.
This also speaks sadly for my three friends(not at the same time)
that thought nobody heard them(those paper thin emotions)...
they took their lives thinking that
life would be better for them
when the raven whisked them away into the
blues forever. From now on when I see the RAVENS
I will think of them and you.

[Anima Inspired]

A beautiful thought...tragic and beautiful. The thing that I like the most is the feeling in the end of the piece...it's sort of like a light at the end of a dark tunnel; an uplifting feeling in the face of tragedy. The "raven" is a great image...used often in poetry and literature, but you've managed to make it slightly new, which is wonderful. I enjoyed this piece...very deep and poignant. Bravo.

[Antony]

A hopeless insight into the hopeless soul...but a raven is the final demise, as they are birds of prey who devour, this one is deep and sounds so final, excellent Dale.
Tony

[Laura E. Aranda]

Hope endures....thanks for asking me to read this piece. I was intrigued from the title and picture you chose to use. I love them...of course Ravens have such dark sinister personalities attached to them and this was quite a creative twist that you used....interesting. I could go on and on but I will stop here! haha
Cheers to you and the Raven, lea

[Donna DeLong Matthews a..]

this was deep and creates such a solom vision

As the dirt begins
To seal their fate.
A last comes the raven
In the knick of time
Whisking them away


Wonder if my raven will ever come
This was in my not so humble opinion
BRILLIANT.
I enjoyed very much
Hugs
Donna

[Christel Grady]

A little "Cheers" to E.A. Poe? Your imagery is palpable. Lovely, dark, mesmerizing write!

[.::Cup^E^Cake*RaWr!*::.]

Wow this is very deep & intense!!
I love this one!!! Everything about it!!!
Great Write!!!

[Wildfleour]

Very intense, Cowboy. Such images of death, darkness and the Raven.......

[Fran Marie]

As the dirt begins

To seal their fate.



A last comes the raven

In the knick of time

Whisking them away

On the wings of forever



An intense piece,on death's dark and mysterious journey midway on it's flight

upward via the wings of the Raven~

Beautifully expressed and well penned my friend~

Fran Marie

[Mysty Rayn]

Whisking them away

On the wings of forever

My favorite part. So deep. Your words always take me somewhere new. I am grateful.

[Norma J. Jessee]

Wow Dale, you keep getting deeper and deeper my friend. In keeping with the Halloween spirit a perfect write. Very well written. Death is always a dark subject. This is going to my favs