The Ballad Of A Haunted House

 

The cobwebs that decorate

These abandoned corridors

Catch the echoes

Before they shatter

Like stained glass

Leaving stone cold walls

Heartbreaking red.

 

Animated spirits

Tell the tales

Of the salty mascara

That brings color

To once lifeless tiles.

 

Arched ceilings

No worse for wear

Except for a few cracks

Out of neglect

Cause four eyes

Were always looking down…

Two in hate,

Two in pain.

 

Now abandoned

Like the child without

A headstone

As heaven and hell

Gain a soul

This house seeks mercy

In the form of

A wrecking ball.

 

Reviews

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I love love love the way you describe this house. It's subtle and yet so full of imagery.

I don't find it creepy; it's a sad house but you are definitely depicting what really goes on in an abandoned house once so full of Energies!

Awesome.... :)

[Elizabeth]

I love this now as much as I did two years ago :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Why thank you... always glad to hear that.

[Renée]

OoOoOooOoOooo love it ! It's October time for all things spooky to lurk about with freedom ! Love this little story & the images in my head .. I love old homes the history..with that last part about being abandoned like a child without a headstone...I will look at them differently now.. that is a powerful image

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you very much... I appreciate the kind feedback. And glad you liked it... I love old homes too, even feel bad for deserted ones.

[Renée]

I dream on the abandon ones.. you can see their beauty though the neglect.I hate to see them torn down & picked apart..

[Cherrie Palmer]

great ending, loved the mental images you stirred up Also the 4eyes peering most exellent

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Thank you very much, getting in that Halloween spirit.

[Cherrie Palmer]

you do an excellent job keeping it fresh

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

the haunting undreams unthreading through a house that was not a home~ emotional imprints in ghost aura pepper the peeling paint and move inside stains~ vivid and gripping~

Were always looking down…

Two in hate,

Two in pain


these lines say it all~

[Aekmy]

Whoa! I haven't read something like this in quite a long time. It's incredible and has so much to say in just a few words. Great job.

[Joanna Maharis]

"Animated spirits
Tell the tales
Of the salty mascara
That brings color
To once lifeless tiles."

I like these lines very much. They bring out a sensuality of the piece so beautifully.

[Tim]

Really good job. I love the way it starts off with the cobweb catching the echoes before they shatter. It's apparent you work out every line of your poems and this really gives a good image to an empty house, it's past, and the only alternative that's left for its future. I'll be reading more from you soon. Great job as always.

[Cassie316]

This is a cool write! For some reason the house reminds me of an elderly person being abandoned in a nursing home waiting to die, as the house too has been abandoned by its family waits for the wrecking ball.
I also like how the font reminds me of spider webs =)
good job, definitely reminds me of Halloween tomorrow!!

[Shawn Killian]

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