Why Can't I?

                                                                                                

Why can’t I say the words

when I tell you everything else

without any problems at all?

Discussing world problems

my mistakes and favorite things,

even tell jokes with the  greatest ease.

So why can’t I say

the most important thing

that my heart bleed.

 

Why can’t I express what I feel

when my emotions are on the surface

on the verge of boiling over?

My friends know the value

of there love and support

and my family know their place in my world.

So why can’t I express

what my soul cry out

when no one is around.

 

So why do I hide what I need to let out?

 

Am I afraid of you won’t feel the same

or scared you’ll feel the same way too?

 

Reviews

[Prose-full]

i like it......
and i dont think it is at all redundant....
i think your point is being taken in by repeating what you feel..
funny, how if your poem is ringing true for you, how us writers somtimes can not "tell"
someone face to face what we write masterpieces about.....

nice write....
be well......

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

thank you so much

[verless doran]

This is a true enough sentiment, but the language is somewhat redundant. "Why are we afraid to say the important things?" is the main question you seem to be asking, but it is run into the ground and lost with too many redundancies and overstatements of the main point.

[J.P. Bristow]

honest expression here....I think everyone feels this at some point.........let it out---honestly its better to know...to try.......than to live with would've.... could've...... should've..... regrets

[Dani California]

Rejection. That's what we fear and why we have such difficulty expressing certain things, particularly matters of the heart. In doing so we make ourselves vulnerable to pain/heartbreak and we all know how devastating that can be.

At least that's my take on it.

Wonderful piece Dale!! As always... :)

[Philip Franklin]

Looks like I'm going to write another song for you. Classic C&W. Real and raw. Do hope I'll be able to work out the software and put it to music. Regards Philip

[Kelly D. Burris]

Very nice piece. Relates the common fear alot of have about stepping out and speaking about emotions. Sometimes all we have to fear is fear itself...... food for thought.
Just 1 typo "that my heart bleed(s).
Nice piece.
Kelly

[BrightEyes]

sometimes - when unsure of the feelings of another - it is so hard to open oneself up, let's face it - rejection sucks lol. But, if we never put ourselves out there and take that chance - then we never leave ourselves open to all that we can obtain. I loved the last line - questioning the greater fear - the rejection or the realization.

laura

[O!]

Love the question in the end.......it makes u think.....since im a blabber mouth when it comes to feelings i cant relate but i understand it very well coz i meet ppl like that who dont or cant reciprocate.

There are a few language errors throughout the poem....u need to check that out.

x,
O!

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

3 words that frighten many .. saying them and sometimes as you write, being afraid they may be said back to you .. this is a good and introspective piece.. i enjoyed it ..

Chloe
xoxo

[None]

There are some people I can't be myself around. I'm not sure why, I thought it was because of love and I got shy around them. Now I see I just didn't click with that person. The reasons are many, you could feel shy. Your poem is written as if the words just flowed out as if you were talking to that person about it all. Excellent!