mistaken for strangers

mistaken for strangers

A Poem by deathcabxcutiex
"

hodge podge of observations and tunes

"

                       I roam alone through rooms we share
                       You catch a glimpse of who I am
                       Return my stare
                       I give a nod but don't give a damn
                       No, I don't give you a damn
                      
Falling slowly, eyes that know me
                       And I can't go back

 


                                Didn't anybody tell you

    Didn't anybody tell you how to gracefully disappear in a room

 



                                                             Words fall through me, always fool me
                                                                           And I can't react
                                                         You'll find what you look for
                                                            You'll make up your mind
                                                   But this quest that you're on
                                                          Has made you half blind
                      
Don't misplace the trust that you have found

 


                                Didn't anybody tell you   
    Didn't anybody tell you how to gracefully disappear in a room

© 2008 deathcabxcutiex


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deathcabxcutiex
a work in progress.. whacha think?

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This poem is wonderfully delivered.
Powerful imagery and even the presentation somehow echoes the uncertainty and lose conveyed.


Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i like it a lot! somehow i think it would be stronger though if, in the last stanza, you changed ONE word so that its more brilliant? if you follow

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I really like it. it flows so beautifully.
i especially like the line
"didn't anybody tell you how to gracefully disappear in a room"
its amazing.
great job.

xox Theresa

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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