Peering into the darkness II

Peering into the darkness

I saw a shadow of a being

As I walked along the bridge

that crosses the murky pond

Near the freeway in the woods

I wasn't quite sure of myself

But I could have sworn

I had just seen an elf

Just as quick as the blink of my eye

He was gone out of my sight

A shivver ran down my spine

The hair upon my neck raised

And I ran for dear life

To the other side of the bridge

I thought I must be seeing things

Or perhaps I'm losing my mind

Queerer things have happened you know

So I shrugged it off and went on my way

Then to my surprise I saw him again

This time he looked like a giant ogre

I thought I would faint

But I let out a scream

This must be a dream

He vanished just as fast as before

That was the night I met a changling

Peering into the darkness

 

Reviews

[Justin Tobey]

This version of your story had more of a fantasy feel to it, but still had a good dose of darkness and fear. You blended those two qualities quite nicely, so that it wasn't so fantastical as to have rainbow flying unicorns prancing through the air, but it wasn't entirely depressing. It was the darker side of fantasy. Good write!

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

Creatively enchanting. It has a horror fairytale twist. Nice work.

[M.M.]

a great poem i like this alot.m.m.

[SPINNING ON that dizzy ..]

I like the playfulness of this - even though it could have been a scary happening! Like the edge or a dream or a bit of your eyes playing tricks on you - gotta watch out for those elves! I like this - as I too have caught a glimpse .... was it a tiny fairy or a mischievous elf.... just out of the corner.... just a trail of light.... just a rustle in the grass..... very magical....


Kath

[ElJays Nicholas]

I enjoy stories like this, especially if they really happened. You create a nice spooky scene, Debileah! Much love to you....

[Poeticpiers]

I loved the theme. It is surprising what you can from the corner of your eye. well presented flight of fantasy or perhaps not just glimpse of alternate reality

[The Mad Prophet]

Interesting, neat little creatures you added. I like Changleings myself. Very well writen, and nice flow.