Black Bird

Black Bird

A Poem by dianalondon
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It is about my first love, and how he regretfully managed to break my heart. This poem metaphorically and through allusions describes the emotional journey I went through at that period.

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Once hurt and broken bad

With wings withered and flight forgotten

The injuries can be cured but the phantom pain retains.

 

He took away my happiness in a blink of an eye

Washed away my love filled heart, 

Where his name was embedded with permanent ink.

 

This little bird could not dream to soar this world again

Crippled, distorted, wishing to hide, ashamed of its broken pinions.

Daylight seemed a lethal weapon, exposing all truth.

 

I gave him my whole soul, and body and what is beyond

My dreams, my laughter my ultimate affection.

To be thrown away with one unfaithful night?

 

Time was the only remedy for the ailing sparrow

Hurling, savage winds have now calmed down

Sharp edged boughs coated in silky leaves.

 

But now I am alive.

Today I can dance, sing and smile.

Today I can fly. 

© 2014 dianalondon


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Very good epic-like. "Hurling, savage winds have now calmed down...Sharp edged boughs coated in silky leaves." wonderful wordings for example. I somehow expected the final word to be "again" or something similar. An ending like that would be in line with how the piece start off as far as I understand. Just a thought that struck me. Very fine!

Posted 10 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

dianalondon

10 Years Ago

Thank you very much! And yes I agree with you, it would make sense to add "again" after "Today I can.. read more



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The first heartbreak is always this way. I think you've captured it well. I've no suggestions though I agree completely that 'again' is a good addition. ...bob

Posted 10 Years Ago


dianalondon

10 Years Ago

Thank you very much for your review!
Beautiful write! I enjoyed the imagery and metaphors used in your piece. I felt the emotion through-out. Nice one!

Posted 10 Years Ago


dianalondon

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much, very glad you liked it! :)
A poignant write. Good use of metaphors. Well done!

Posted 10 Years Ago


dianalondon

10 Years Ago

Thank you very much!
Very good epic-like. "Hurling, savage winds have now calmed down...Sharp edged boughs coated in silky leaves." wonderful wordings for example. I somehow expected the final word to be "again" or something similar. An ending like that would be in line with how the piece start off as far as I understand. Just a thought that struck me. Very fine!

Posted 10 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

dianalondon

10 Years Ago

Thank you very much! And yes I agree with you, it would make sense to add "again" after "Today I can.. read more
Beautiful and well expressed.

Posted 10 Years Ago


dianalondon

10 Years Ago

Thank you very much!

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Tags: love, heartbreak, liberty, sadness, faith, emotions, breakthrough, revelation

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London, United Kingdom



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