Cut Open and Torn Apart

On the outside I seem okay.
On the inside it feels like I'm dead even though I'm alive.
By everyone that knows me.
Other days I feel like I am the happiest person on the planet.
I can call that a lie.

I am cut open and torn apart.
Your words can't help.
Your actions won't work.
It is all because I am cut open and torn apart.

Through all of the fake smiles.
All of the fake laughs.
I'm faking everything just to get away from you.
Not that I don't love you.
I really do it's just that I feel hurt on the inside.

I am cut open and torn apart.
Your words can't help.
Your actions won't work.
It is all because I am cut open and torn apart.

I don't know what I did.
I don't know how it happened.
The reason that I am hurt on the inside.
But I can say that I don't like it.

I am cut open and torn apart.
Your words can't help.
Your actions won't work.
It is all because I am cut open and torn apart.

Author's Note

I guess it is a song more than a poem, but oh well just tell me what you think.

Reviews

[Maria F. Rojas]

yeah, you can fool people thinking you are a happy person. Only person that knows for real is yourself and you have to deal with the feelings you have been through each day til you move on then there is nothing left to lie with yourself. Painful but not a bad song. Keep up. :)

[RonnieBreight]

Cut open and torn apart... It sounds like there's been so much damage that it can't be repaired with words or actions. It's pretty. :).

[Emilia Kuemin]

I can relate to the faking. I do enjoy this poem, a few things would have to be tweaked for it to be called a song. But over-all, very nice write.

[James Johnson]

i can relate to this so much :)

[Mitch*Dandy]

I love this it really shows how you feel on the inside. I feel like this in many times of my life. Very well written and I just love how you word every line.
I love it! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

A very strong poem. You wrote with strength and told a sad story. Sometime healing take time and our mind to figure what we want. I like the feel and emotion of this poem. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[tynamite]

That is so true. Yeah depression is bad, I was nearly depressed so I am scared to know what full depression is like. Laughing at something then switching back to depression as soon as it's over.

You've really described emotions really well and sharply with this poem. Not many people know how to do that with their poems. Very nice.

[Daniel Gardner]

This is great. It flows nicely and even though you say its a poem, has i read i can hear the melody in my head. You used very powerful words which makes this such a powerful, meaningful, heart felt write. Great job!!

[A.Lee]

"Through all of the fake smiles.
All of the fake laughs.
I'm faking everything just to get away from you.
Not that I don't love you.
I really do it's just that I feel hurt on the inside"

Very well written. I think you hit a lot of people's feelings right on the head with this piece. Great work. I like the repetition of "I am cut open and torn apart".

[FeliciaS (Poetic Prince..]

I know exactly what you are talking about here. That kind of pain can take years to heal from. I'm so glad we met! I will be here for you if you need a friend!

[Jason Ellis]

Sounds like someone or something really hurt you.
"Other days, I feel like I'm the happiest person on the planet.
I can call that a lie."
I like those lines. It's like you keep telling yourself you're happy, but you know it isn't true.
I agree with past reviewers, I wish it had a little more depth to it.
Still, it's a good write.