Repent

 The black mass of iniquity known as my heart 

Was cruelly ripped to shreds by your death 

And now I have no clue from where to start 

Or who I can trust to waste my breath 

 

Because all wrongdoings end in pain 

And mine have come back to enlighten me 

And all efforts at resolutions end in vain 

How could I have been so blind not to see

 

For I should have known what war does to men 

And foresaw your fate, inevitable doom already cast

Since an enemy's blood is a sweet addiction

When the shackles of destiny hold you fast

Author's Note

Ha my poem for my english homework on Achilles and Patroclus :D watcha think??? ^_^

Reviews

[Safrina]

I really, really like this. I feel the truth in every line x

[Sheila Marie Carr]

Another great poem; You are very talented and gifted as a writer great job

[Ethan Paz]

You a really good writer. Wow....

[D. Pesek]

"Because all wrongdoings end in pain

And mine have come back to enlighten me "

The rest of the poem was good but these two lines really stood out to me for some reason.

"Since an enemy's blood is a sweet addiction"

This line is very true, well put.

[Sexy P3nguin]

I think it is awesome! :D
GOOD JOB! KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!

[Deepshikha]

Prettyfuuuul. Sounds like a song. ;]

[Sseoni]

Wow! What an awesome poem! I really mean that! Amazing descriptions and details! I loved it! Fantastic poem! :D