cruel

cruel

A Poem by Abbie

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the world is so cold

so cruel

i freeze at night when im alone

because i miss

your warm arms around me

there to protect me 

where are you

are you with her

are you out with yuor friends

were are you to night ? 

 

© 2010 Abbie




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So, I would first say, nice emotion. I would include more punctuation, go through and check that you haven't made typos... all that stuff. I would also consider changing up your word choice to make this more interesting. Perhaps elaborate on the emotional connection between the speaker and the one she's talking to?

-Coral-

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Posted 13 Years Ago


Man I think everyone as asked these questions

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I feel the emotion of this one...like the colors :)
Peace

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Posted 13 Years Ago


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heartfelt piece..well done

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Posted 13 Years Ago


So sad. Loved the color of your font. Lots of emotion in this write. Bet you felt better after writing this poem.

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Added on October 8, 2010
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Abbie
Abbie

taco bell, NM



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my name is Abbie, i love 2 write poetry,but i am mostly nice anything you want to know ask more..

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emptiness emptiness

A Poem by Abbie