After the  21st winter

After the 21st winter

A Poem by black.butterfly
"

for a year that starts anew

"

After 21th winter


Through her eyes, that had shed rivers,

pain and flesh became intertwined.

Now, her heart bursts and shivers,

for a fate it has been assigned.

 

Now, time has elapsed

and the rivers have dried out.

The heaviness in her heart collapsed,

so there is nothing to stir about.

 

A year where sun and clouds never meet;

it is the heart of a sky that never glooms.

Once more the pulses of hope beat

and a thornless red rose blooms.

© 2010 black.butterfly


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black.butterfly
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Excellent stanzas. I like the short, straight to the point feel of this. But I almost feel that it need some explanation as to what it was that changed and made the rivers dry and the heaviness collapse. That might just be me, though... I do tend to be long winded. Asss made evident by this. Heh. Anyway.

I really do enjoy the rhyme and flow of this piece, though. It's very well balanced with each line and word. Great job. :]

Posted 13 Years Ago


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I love this. Very well written and powerful. Your poem has a sad aura and I could feel it while I was reading it. Awesome. ^___^

Posted 13 Years Ago


Beautiful write. Releasing the past and starting anew full of hope.

Posted 13 Years Ago


I absolutely loved this. I could feel the passion and emotions in this piece. It was fantastic!!!!

Posted 13 Years Ago


Excellent. I love how you wrote this with a passionlike feel :P Well I dunno, im stupid x]

Posted 13 Years Ago


great flow, excellent write.

Posted 13 Years Ago


New beginnings...the prospect of achieving all that never was - an inspiring thought. Thank you. :-)

Posted 13 Years Ago


This is a very beautifully written poem. Love the meaning in the poem. Love the start of something new indeed. It holds a personal meaning to me as well, so this was brilliantly done. Wonderful job.

Posted 13 Years Ago


This was so greatly written and it was beautiful :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


I love the poem to no end.

Posted 13 Years Ago


This is nicely written. Your words are beautiful and expressive. I love that even though it's a short poem it evokes so much. It's much like a flower. At the beginning it speaks like a dead, broken, and crushed flower and as it goes towards the end it's much like a phoenix rising from the ashese reborn. Very nice. :)

Posted 13 Years Ago



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