Leakage

Leakage   

 

 

when it comes to your love

my heart is like a screen

trying to stave off a pelting rain

 

i have no storm window defense---

 

you are the torrential difference

that floods my emotions.

 

 

erin-cilberto

12/2/15

Reviews

[NeiL ArandA]

I have seen so many beautiful girls in cover magazine s. But I have never been really in the midst and presence of areal tangible one. I heard about a list of the most beautiful girl in the world . Theres one girl in the ancient times that has both beauty and character and it was the one that captivated King Xeres heart . Ester winsome appeal is both a jaggernaut and ravaging . I would feel the same in the presence. of one . I like the word " torrential " ..The gutter can he overwhelmed by it ...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your interesting response, Neil...always enjoy reading your thoughts,
j.

[CD Campbell]

You made me wonder if the love that the subject was being lashed with was good or bad. I like the imagery. You might need to get a handyman. CD

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i'll hire one as soon as i can afford one...:)))

thank you, CD.

j.

[David Scott]

Do we really all live in that yellow submersible marine vehicle after all?
There is no holding it back.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

not sure, but i'll ask Ringo....:)

yes, no holding back.

[Chris]

This one left a deep and knowing sigh in its wake...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Chris.

j.

[h d e rushin]

a very tender, yet artful approach to love, to poetry writing, to rain, to the torrent of nature,
to replacement windows, to someone else. I have come, over the past few years to expect
nothing else from you but the deepest sway, the most analytical swathe and the most adorned
swaddle.

your amazing....dana

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, dana.

j.

[A.K.F]

Very interesting. I enjoy the metaphor and find it quite appropriate. Short and too the point. A very enjoyable read.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words,

j.

[B]

In love
there is no protection

you have no concern if there is a leakage
you just enjoy everything

good and bad
lovely :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Nisreen..

j.

[Julia Ledo]

I love descriptions of overwhelming love. Nicely done.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Julia.
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Fantastic metaphor. No storm windows....brilliant! Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, my friend.

j.