just before the stillness intercedes

just before the stillness intercedes

 

 

hi top forest,

redwood hats,

limbs bowed in etiquette's rendering

 

courteous leaves trying to silently weep

but the young grass below

feels the aged tears pond themselves

 

as floods of emotion

get lost in wooded ambivalence

and suddenly, 

 

the breeze tears itself apart

trying to decide,

which way to fall.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

1/5/15

Reviews

[paddy d daly]

Evokes feelings and wonderings
and thinking of being there and
What might happen, great imagery
Jacob, took me to another place. P

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, paddy,

j.

[Corset]

Jacob you are on a roll, I love every aspect of this poem, though I can not tell you why, it just feels right, nudges something , ya know.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Corset.

j.

[A hare off]

And still somehow it always seems to have a way of working things out when the green returns in spring. Deep thoughts in this poem Jacob. Really well done.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, A hare.

j.

[Adam Adams]

Ah... ev'n the life's itself seemed like the "Stillness Of Ambivalence" that has no direction to be rendered neither any separate way to get directed. Very deep & evocative poetry. Liked d way u bleed in such "nature" words. Beautiful. Seemed, the flood that engulfed things around in some counties got ya inspired by its own intercedes. Not a bad shot. Great job!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Adams...

j.

[Kelsey Ann]

'If a tree falls in a forest'... it's as if you took the classic brain-teaser and spun it into a beautiful poem. Great job!!! :-D

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Kelsey Ann,

j.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

So many times in our lives we face life altering choices and which way that winds blows is often hard to feel.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that is so true, thank you, Dale.

j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

I guess nature has bad days too.

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Al.
j.

[Miss Sharon]

Beautifully written with perfect form and content! How do you keep doing this Jacob? Bravissimp. ~Sharon

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Sharon.

j.

[andrew mitchell]

Gob smacked, the imagery is unreal , the last stanza where the breeze decides which way to fall! Nice J

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, andrew.

j.

[Olivia]

I'm very impressed by your effortlessness in describing nature. You take a beautiful scene of nature and turn it into something more, for both the eye and mind. Well done!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Olivia...
j.