just before the stillness intercedes

just before the stillness intercedes

 

 

hi top forest,

redwood hats,

limbs bowed in etiquette's rendering

 

courteous leaves trying to silently weep

but the young grass below

feels the aged tears pond themselves

 

as floods of emotion

get lost in wooded ambivalence

and suddenly, 

 

the breeze tears itself apart

trying to decide,

which way to fall.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

1/5/15

Reviews

[Connie]

I love the flow of this. I felt as I could have been a bird sitting atop of the tree witnessing this. Nicely written

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Connie.
j.

[Relic]

You never lose steam with any new poem you write. There is always a wow, cool moment involved at the end. This is no exception. The personification is almost surreal. Great writing Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Tim...

j.