a poet didn't write this

a poet didn't write this

 

 

 

i am going to un-write you,

even if i have to spell all the words backwards

this non-poem will defunct your spell on me

 

tears dot the i's

handkerchief hallucinations

of love,

extended rhyme with you

never had even similar sounds

 

wasn't slant rhyme

more like dead rhyme

free verse for you

a lonely sonnet for me,

badly written

 

i am going to un-write you,

watch my fingers move like lightning

there will be thunder in my theme

 

as i dream you, not awake

but away

with middle of the night blackening 

of the white sheets,

 

that no longer have purity in context

just a conjuring of text

to undo

you.

 

 

erin-cilberto

4/8/16

Reviews

[Cryingkate]

This is another of your fun ones Jacob. It's so fun I want to join in :-)

I was thinking that someone slid out of line between the paper sheets
I'm doubting even explanatory parentheses could of held them in place
Thank Heavens, they'll be no conjunction to be sentenced to.

can I get a grade :-) hey guess what? What a neat way of learning the rules by responding.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

nope, no conjunction...maybe an adverb or two...:)

thank you for reading and for the nice comment, my friend.

j.

[Cryingkate]

uh oh..... I better close my eyes. I think there could be a lot of graphic traffic:-)

[Carolynn]

Very powerful. I've preferred to just erase in the past but perhaps this would be more gratifying :) wonderful as usual Jacob!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Carolynn....

j.

[Pryde Foltz]

as i dream you, not awake
but away
with middle of the night blackening
of the white sheets,

Clever, clever. Way to write, Jacob:)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Pryde.

j.

[charlie]

This is most uncanny! I drafted a piece just yesterday, called 'un-poem' ...

Must be something in the ethers, Jacob. Spooky .........

...enough about me: I apologise...

This is very clever writing, and for all the back-peddling, not much ambiguity. More like a confession. Sincere. Not bad - for poet who didn't write this.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, a bit of twilight zone....but i am used to that happening with me almost all the time...these types of coincidences...so doesn't shock me...looking forward to your un-poem...i will make sure to un-read it.

[charlie]

Thanks for the thought, Jacob. I think I'm going to send it somewhere else when it's finally done

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and thank you for your kind comment on the poem....