on that rocking horse saddle

on that rocking horse saddle

 

 

like morphing from rock to country

i inverted pavement

into a save meant to break my city soul

down to earthen roots

under open skies

 

and tree lined hearts

shading the centrifugal force

that kept me going in concrete circles

with scraped knees and ruined jeans

 

the patches grew like acorns

from the woods that sang songs to me

with a little more twang

but a whole lot more bang

 

for my rural buck.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

10/7/16

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I admit I had to read this twice to glean every crafty reference . . . but I eventually came out with my own country-living preference . . . remembering how moving to this spot was also "a save" for my "city soul" (which had become rather soulless surrounded by concrete). My favorite: the last 2 lines where you transform a cliché making it sing with originality! *smile* (((HUGS)))

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are too kind, barleygirl...

thank you for your review.

j.

[andrew mitchell]

Hi J the title reminded me of the movie "the rocking horse winner" I liked this write, probably Neil Young for country rock , like Lydia I'm more into the 70's progressive rock bands. The poem was spot on by the way!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

didn't know that was also a movie...i used to teach the short story though...thank you for your words...i, too, like Neil...i like some of the newest country, but not all that much...i am a rocker from the time rock and roll started when i was six years old.

[Corset]

My Dad would never let us buy the jeans pre-faded or with holes like the style, he said it was a ridiculous waste of money and a life. He said you buy the jeans and then live the faded holes into them, otherwise it's just a farce for fad.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ha ha....yes, i can relate...

thank you, Corset...

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Not sure I will ever be a country girl....whether in music genre or home. Loved the line, "scraped knees and ruined jeans"....if the country sounds pull you in, best to go with it. For me, classic rock will always be an inspiration. Good one. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and Classic rock is always my first love, for sure, it's my roots...but i am just more open these days...grew up with rock and roll from the year it started in '56...there i was...six years old and dancing to Elvis and others.

thanks, Lydi.

j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Elvis the Pelvis! LOL

[W.k.kortas]

To paraphrase the title of a Lawrence short story, this rocking horse is a winner.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I used to teach that story in my lit class...a good one for sure.

thank you, W.k.
read moreI used to teach that story in my lit class...a good one for sure.

thank you, W.k.

j.

[Ted Kniffen]

j. I remember when our local radio station moved from country to rock. I live in the shadow of Motown, but grew up listening to everything, big band, Texas swing, the Opry. There is something simple and honest about country music I still enjoy. Thanks for the ride.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, i do like the simple and honest part of it...and i do like some country...but more of a rocker at heart....all the old stuff...Motown is the best, and love rockabilly, doo-wop and british invasion as well as old hard rock and heavy metal.
thanks, Ted.

[Ted Kniffen]

All of my favourites j.

[Ruth]

There is something about your poetry that speaks to all hearts Jacob...an emotion throughout that gives the reader a feeling to your words, not just a block of letters but far more than that...your writing has a tone of its own, magnificent :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i appreciate your kind words, Poppy, and am glad you can relate to the writing.

j.

[Jon Roggie]

Let the music play. Songs adding to memories, creating our recollections.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Jon, for your words,
j

[Chris]

Very nice use of metaphors, jacob. Metaphorical imagery disguised as plain description "down to earthen roots under open skies"

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Chris.

j.

[Ana Papaya]

Remember when we used to say 'the grass is greener...'
Where's the green space now?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so true...thank you, Ana.

j.