3 Senryu

3 Senryu

 

 

losses

 

 

stocks in love have dropped

trust is a commodity

the value broken

 

 

 

a simple fracture

 

 

tripped on thoughts of you

sprained the knowing in my heart

felt the love bone break

 

 

 

superfluous adjectives

 

 

superlatives fly

best girl, best love, ex-partner

ex-best memories

 

 

 

4/23/17

erin-cilberto

Reviews

[Ruth]

The most simple things can turn so complex and before we know it we are on a roller coaster of piecing pieces together and what better methods to use than a delicate senryu...only adds more emotion and power to the emotion underneath...beautiful Jacob...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Poppy...

j.

[emmajoy]

Clever, tongue in cheek excellence, jacob. Seems there's little you can't do with words!

Don't doubt you could fill a book with more of the above!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i usually sprinkle some of them into my books...just for a change of pace...

thank you for your kind words, emma.
j.

[mou]

you have used the familiar words in such a beautiful way that unrecognized feelings lightened up..wonderful creative write where emotion is the captain as always..

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, mou.
j.

[Norman 223]

Your skilful play on words have raised these senryu to a higher level than one usually sees. Absolutely stunning, both in sentiment and style, Jacob.
N.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Norman.
j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Three excellent senryu all packed with punchy emotion and meaning Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, John.
j.

[Sami Khalil]

All three and good. Your creativity never ceases to amaze people...Great, sir...:)......................

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Sami.
j.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome. ...::::))))