Estimate

Estimate

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto


Estimate

 

 

you're my fender bender absorption

the dents to my once mobile heart

now i am in the shop for repairs

and considering the mileage accrued

with past relationships

running on painful tread,  

 

 

i have a notion to park myself in a lot

and idle with you for awhile,

the dents are just cosmetic

but my interior has been brought back to its original sheen

by your love

 

and as long as i know i can drive away if i need to

my feeling is that i won't want to---

as long as you are sitting in the passenger seat.

 

 

erin-cilberto

2/14/18

© 2018 jacob erin-cilberto


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"Estimate"
jacob-erin-cilberto,
This phrase is full of hope! "Fender bender adsorption".
You know, this poem of yours speaks of such beauty...pain absorbed
like a sponge. Love does that. Writing of the past nicks,
scratches, and desecration of your soul's shell. This car
of yours has found a great auto body shop.
Found this so cute:
"I have a notion to park myself in a lot
and idle with you for awhile,
and dents are just cosmetic
but my interior has been brought back to its original sheen
(by your love") this little line speaks volumes.
Fun read for sure!
Blessings,
Kathy

Posted 3 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Years Ago

thank you for your kind review, Kathy...
j.
Love this
Very clever but not surprised Jacob up to your usual love it

Posted 3 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Years Ago

thank you for your kind words, Julie.
j.
Fender bender. That should be the word of the year.
Some people just make you happy.
You need to hold onto them at all costs.

Posted 3 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Years Ago

thank you for your words, Paul.
j.
dear J... the older the Violin... the sweeter the music... A Vintage Voyage is priceless... Anen

Posted 3 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Years Ago

thank you, Pat--appreciate your visit...
j.
Despite the nuts-and-bolts metaphorical imagery, "Estimate" is intensely romantic.
Thoroughly enjoyed this high-quality piece!


Posted 3 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Years Ago

thank you, Jimmy---
j.
This metaphor is superb, Jacob! No matter how many times a heart has been broken, there is that one special "one" out there who can repair the damage. Unfortunately they don't make replacement parts for our models anymore! :) The romance in this one is hidden, but still there. Lydi**

Posted 3 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Years Ago

you are so perceptive....thank you for your words, Lydi...
j.
as long as you are sitting in the passenger seat.

:) sweetness dipped cotton candy :P that's how i felt when i read this :))


Posted 3 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Years Ago

thank you, Galadriel, :))))
clever & creative. this one not a lemon. as they say, when life hands you lemons, make lemonade ...

Posted 3 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Years Ago

thank you, Pete.
j.
Just as long as her name isn't Christine! ; )

Posted 3 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Years Ago

oh geez, you made me start humming "Bad to the Bone"---if there is a 1958 Plymouth Fury in the poem,.. read more
Such flair and polish in this superb write. Once restored, the drive takes care of itself.

Posted 3 Years Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Years Ago

thank you, andrew.
j.

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jacob erin-cilberto
jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at two community colleges and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. Friending works two ways. If we have had .. more..

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