the grains of it

the grains of it

 

 

dreary components

a compartmentalized day of love

 

metal detectors

lie detectors

beaches strewn with unwanted apparel

a nude beach where naked souls detach

true feelings sift through sandy compromises

 

we love in sunburned fashioned

too fast, too intense

and then the moderation happens to fall

and we become an autumn of derisive splendor

 

each step, one towards the breaking of the sun

and exposure to a fatal moon

 

and then the planets weep

for what could have been

if patience had found its reign

and sandcastles found intricate patterns

of perpetual attraction

within their silted walls.

 

 

erin-cilberto

3/28/18

Reviews

[Dinesh Kumar]

Excellent piece of writing
Beautiful

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Dinesh.

[Dinesh Kumar]

Mention not

[Coyote Poetry]

So many lines stood out in this poem Jacob. I wanted to read and know more. You gave glimpses of places and life beheld. Thank you my friend for sharing the wonderful poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Coyote.
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Jacob.

[Neville]

This is a very fine example of one of those multi dimensional poems one hopes to stumble across every now and again, and which keeps the curious reader wondering and amused during the many visits these words demand........seriously good, in any book.............Neville

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Neville.
j.

[sette]

and then the planets weep

for what could have been

if patience had found its reign

and sandcastles found intricate patterns

of perpetual attraction

within their silted walls. -- the metaphors used and the hyperbole in the first line made me be surprised with the creativity with words used. nice piece of writing jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, sette.
j.

[sette]

you are welcome jacob

[θεά]

Beautiful. How true, we love in a sunburned fashion. Too intensely like fireflies only to burn out. Loved the image of sandcastles and the insularity of it all. Great work Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Mallika...
j.