Murmurs

Murmurs

 

 

when our breaths became one

lips evaporating into lips

tongues slashing rhythmic tunes

June spring, we blossomed into summer

 

the heat of the moment

becoming the heat of forever

hands cementing grip, paving

mutual grasp

 

the aisle of smiling repertoire

gamboling feet arriving

at the altar's shore

two ships sailing into sunset

poetic words in chorus

 

when heartbeats fused

as one entity

walk on water

 

it's the miracle of us.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

7/30/19

Reviews

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Yes, It's a miracle of us.
This to me doesn't mean much about love to me,
but togetherness written with a lovely ink .
hold me, I hold you, and we'll walk the miles as twins.
help me, I help you, and we'll live together in peace.
Through the pains together, and through the soothing breeze,
that's greatly a kind of a lovely unity, and I like this piece.

Great job, Jacob. I can feel that homologous emotional feelings.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you so much for your kind words, Kay,
j.

[barleygirl]

I love your first two verses, describing how the summer season crashes upon us with roiling sensations & observations. Your poem feels like a tumbling river crashing into the sea (V1 & V2), then things simmer into a smooth glide across the wide-open waters (V3 & V4) . . . great metaphor for how relationships often begin! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you so much for your kind review, Margie.
j.

[Unspoken poet]

this is a wonderful write here, nicely written

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, choosen,
j.

[Onlyme]

Beautiful expressed and so emotive, the sparks of passion and love, bursting and coming alive with two souls becoming one.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Dawn,
j.

[Neville]

when both parties are in love like that, anything seems possible doesn't it..there is no me, nor personal boundaries, tis summat else entirely... I have witnessed a few miracles and true..

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Neville,
j.

[Neville]

nowt but a pleasure and nowt but mine sir..

N.

[andrew mitchell]

It is a miracle how that attraction gets started, then burns like an out of control bushfire til it burns out with time.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, andrew,
j.

[Wondering Mind]

Murmurs is such a lovely expression.
And such a lovely poem to compliment it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Wondering Mind,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Young love with all its burning desire and optimism captured perfectly here. Took me back it did. 'the miracle of us'
How well that line encapsulates those heady days.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your visit, Chris,
j.

[TheJordBaker]

Powerful and visual piece.
Good work again Jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Jordan,
j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

This evokes the naivety of youth and those heady days when romance was an ideal we could subscribe to. This takes me back to the seventies. As always such diction in the weaving of words and phrases into concepts and emotions Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, John,
j.