the little shelter in the snow

the little shelter in the snow

A Poem by jacob erin-cilberto


the little shelter in the snow

 

 

 

agitated lover,

caressed by her tears

 

can't do more than absorb them

upon his own skin

 

he wants to shake them loose

hold her eyes in his

so she feels at home

within iris walls

the safe space within his vision

 

so that with dry cheeks

they can climb mountains of tribulations

with a certain ease

 

leave that cold cabin of fear

and intimate pain

 

to dwell on an apex

in amalgamated glory.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

11/9/19

© 2019 jacob erin-cilberto


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Wonderfully written. I really liked the language and the use of eyes and Iris in such a way as in lines-
he wants to shake them loose
hold her eyes in his
so she feels at home
within iris walls
the safe space within his vision.

Very nice work 👍




Posted 3 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Weeks Ago

thank you for your kind words, Anjeline...
j.
Anjeline

3 Weeks Ago

You're welcome and it's my pleasure to read such good work.
I see old age, a dying love and the wish to rewind the clock, a sad writeJ.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Weeks Ago

thank you, andrew...
j.
That feeling of wanting to make everything better, wanting all to be peace and harmony. Sadly that only works, if the other wants it too. Poignant piece here Jacob and relatable too.

Chris

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Weeks Ago

thank you for your kind review, my friend.
j.
This is what poetry is all about Jacob. Not only to convey the writers thoughts, but to inspire in others that moment of perfect clarity, that is so clearly heatd and felt, the hope that they too will reach that pinnacle of thought kissing the page with no possibility of contradiction.
Feels a little unfair to pick a standout line, but holding her eyes in his, well... Perfect.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Weeks Ago

thank you for your considerate review, my friend....and your understanding.
j.
Lorry

3 Weeks Ago

You are very welcome.
It's a natural inclination to provide shelter for those you love, even more so is the desire to pull them close when they are pulling away. In the process, you can find yourself open to the elements with no shelter of your own. All the love in the world is never enough if the same is not reciprocated, that intimate pain too deeply felt and known.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Weeks Ago

thank you for your insightful review, Linda,
j.
The desires of men to fix, rarely does the understanding go deep enough. I have been here, and have failed and succeeded, but the failures sound more deeply. Trying is the key that will eventually get the rusty lock to turn but patience is the trust that allows us to throw away the locks all together. Great writing Jacob.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Weeks Ago

thank you for your insightful words, Crowley...
j.
Superb and picturesque explanation of true empathy and love, beautifully done with enriched words like amalgamation, excellent job.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Weeks Ago

thank you for your kind words, Linda,
j.
To draw those into shelter from the storm into a safe place. Compassion is what makes us human.
T

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Weeks Ago

it sure is, T.
thank you,
j.
dear Jacob.... to amalgamate is a generous offering
when two souls merge... and reach the pinnacle or
High Noon of love and caring... where Eagles fly and nest.
truly, Pat

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Weeks Ago

thank you for your insightful words, Pat,
j.
A truly wonderful write that is brimming with love and understanding. Rich with metaphors that embrace the emotions and draw the reader in, I found myself hanging onto each and every word. This is one I will want to save and absorb over time.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


jacob erin-cilberto

3 Weeks Ago

thank you for such a kind review, Dara,
j.

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jacob erin-cilberto

Carbondale, IL



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Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at two community colleges and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. Friending works two ways. If we have had .. more..

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