reading through your poems (which I identify with --but keep editing and rewriting my comments in my head)... I really connect to your words. this one is so simple and beautiful.. the bridge-less tower that that stands in the aftermath of love that still is there but having lost it's connection is left to rebuild. Really loved this
this picture introduces us to how we piece together our dreams before the torpid, negligent state of slumber drags us off. "In which the drawbridge was broken" is slowed down willingness and the magic of poetry time where distance and longing is a method of reckoning; of which the sweven ,somnolent beauty of this colors the town.....lovely....dana
"you left nothing in your wake
except one small tower
to which the drawbridge
was broken."
This makes me think of waiting for a type of love that may never return...and even if new love presents itself not being able to allow it inside. Really excellent work, this made me think a lot
Posted 3 Years Ago
3 Years Ago
I really like where you took this, BLACKCRUSH,
thank you,
j.
How lonely that tower must be? I would say peaceful in my case. This poem makes me wonder off in imagining the writers time in that tower. I love this piece.
Remembering love that swells with the tide; strong, leaving nothing undone. But then the drawbridge breaks, the love that was binding was washed away; only a remnant of it left, the small tower.
A lovey metaphorical way of describing broken love. Really liked this one Jacob. As always,
Best, Betty
Yes, love can be like a swelling tide, lifting you with it. On the other hand, it can also leave high and dry and lonely. Be thankful for that one little tower. It could be worse.
Posted 3 Years Ago
3 Years Ago
I am thankful there was a tower once...:)))
thank you, John.
j.
It's funny how some relationships can seem like such traumatic storms or even a hurricane, but you can't ever seem to get over the pain that came with that storm! Very nice poem thank you for this!
Posted 3 Years Ago
3 Years Ago
Yes, even a hurricane...thank you for your kind words, Hayllie,
j.
Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at a community college and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. I am here to read for inspiration from other po.. more..